Deep in the Forest by  Mikhowl
Original HERE.

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Man. First off, I gotta commend you for the time you've put into creating this tournament; setting the match-ups; writing the stories; taking the ideas of the winner into account when writing your stories.

This story was easy to follow along with. It was clear, it was consistent, and it was enjoyable.

I liked the line, "He murred and lapped at its chest and listened to the soundtrack of whimpers now coming from deep in his throat." The usage of "soundtrack" was borderline out of context but I'd have much preferred it over "sounds" because "sounds" is too expected.

"Shwoopy sighed as he felt is stomach start to gurgle, now making satisfied noises instead of hungry ones." This was another favorite of mine!

Use as many relatively new and unique words and phrases as possible! You're doing a good job with this; but every now and then ("now and then" was used a couple times but no pun is intended) I see you repeat yourself: by using "a while", and then "for a while," in a later paragraph. Things like that.

Overall this was a pretty fuckin' awesome story and I can't wait to read the rest you've in store for the tournament!

- xSini