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Not all danger in dungeons comes from sentient creatures. Sometimes the mindless ones are the most dangerous of all.
I'm satisfied with this one. I probably could've done somewhat better, but I can always revise it. And now that I've got one done, hopefully more will come along after it.
The seventh in the series of stand-alone TF vignettes I did tormenting my character Kawheek(pronounced Kaw-week). They're not meant to be impressive stories, just practice on TF scenes.
I'm satisfied with this one. I probably could've done somewhat better, but I can always revise it. And now that I've got one done, hopefully more will come along after it.
The seventh in the series of stand-alone TF vignettes I did tormenting my character Kawheek(pronounced Kaw-week). They're not meant to be impressive stories, just practice on TF scenes.
Category Story / Transformation
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 2.8 kB
Yeah, it's always sad when a person transforms into an inanimate object or something where they lose their mind, because then that person essentially dies, like how Kawheek died here.
You handled the entire transformation very well. This is gonna sound weird, but I like how you broke his bones as he transformed. It's something internal that people don't seem to think about with transformation.
I'm a big fan of transformation stories and thumbing thru some of your other writings I see that you have a wonderful writing style. You are much more descriptive and use more unique words in your stuff. For example. instead of the bland "Fur grew on his legs and he fell and became four legged" You wrote "As he watched, the fur started up his legs, cannibalizing scales on the way up as his legs adjusted with a sickening crunch to quadrupedal locomotion" That is filled with imagery and stuff. I can imagine that kinda sickening almost wet cruching sound that would associated with that. Wonderful stuff.
Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more stuff from you.
You handled the entire transformation very well. This is gonna sound weird, but I like how you broke his bones as he transformed. It's something internal that people don't seem to think about with transformation.
I'm a big fan of transformation stories and thumbing thru some of your other writings I see that you have a wonderful writing style. You are much more descriptive and use more unique words in your stuff. For example. instead of the bland "Fur grew on his legs and he fell and became four legged" You wrote "As he watched, the fur started up his legs, cannibalizing scales on the way up as his legs adjusted with a sickening crunch to quadrupedal locomotion" That is filled with imagery and stuff. I can imagine that kinda sickening almost wet cruching sound that would associated with that. Wonderful stuff.
Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more stuff from you.
Personally, i'm not think as loose the mind is death. I'm think in it as if all his/her memory is alternate into some diferent, but he/she is the same. I means, the same creature find myself with a new life. Isteand a death, i'm see mind control as "Recycling" the subject. And my apologizes if it is offensive to you, KitsuneKit, but i'm like Mind Control in the TF stories, and this coment is just for try defend my likes.
By the way, the story is very good, and imaginative in the description of the TF. But, sincerely, I'm jealous of this, since I feel unable to write a history in English if i'm never going to be able to do a work as magnificent as yours.
By the way, the story is very good, and imaginative in the description of the TF. But, sincerely, I'm jealous of this, since I feel unable to write a history in English if i'm never going to be able to do a work as magnificent as yours.
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