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Chapter IV: The adventure begins!
Meanwhile back at the Xion Hospital, Benny was placed on his bed with Vanguard, Korino, and Enelya sitting right next to him. Then all of the sudden Benny wakes up and the kids looked in amazement to find Benny alive, "it's not possible" Benny said to his students, "I'm alive but-how I thought I was-" the doctor walks in with Benny's armor that had stab wound inside but inside shined a bright light that was inside the armor, "Well Mr. Skylar it's seems this armor is has a special plate designed by someone named Nava Skylar do you know anyone by that name sir?" Benny recognized that name and said, "Yes I do it belonged to father Nava for years, I thought he buried inside the sanctuary inside Aleu's room, I guess I was wrong." While everyone was taking care of Benny, Redcoat comes in, "guys! guys I heard that-oh everyone is already here, hey Redcoat don't worry I'm fine but can you do me a favor? Of course what is it? I need to make the same armor for my sons and Enelya with my fathers armor plating on it so that it protect them from Shadow and his clan. Sure thing old friend I'll get started on it right away I'll contact you when it's done, get well my friend." After a few months passed by Benny was able to make a full recovery after the fight with shadow, Korino was able to get a mechanical arm with sliver plating with Nava's plate of light inside it. Redcoat was waiting inside his shop until Benny, his sons, and Enelya came in, "Ah welcome my friends I just got the armor ready and special weapons that was able use with Nava's armor plating, these weapons can slay any darkness you may encounter especially Shadow himself. Thank you Redcoat for everything and I need you to come with us so we can stop Shadow once and for all and save my wife Aleu. Really Benny? Alright I'll go with in can help repair armor, weapons, and medical treatment when needed. Good now everyone get some sleep for tomorrow when the sun rises we journey to the other side of Xion and find Aleu before it is too late." Vanguard got his stuff packed but he worried on what happened to his mother but he knew had to strong for her and her Girlfriend if they are able to defeat Shadow and save the World from darkness that is coming. Benny got inside his speeder that was able hold everyone and everything on it. Benny got up and said to his sons, Enelya, and Redcoat "Today we start our journey toward Shadows domain, you all have special talents, skills, and courage by your side and mine, we will take what we have and journey across Xion until we find our friend, mother, and my wife Aleu. Remember that we always have eacother believe in yourself and you can conquer any darkness that comes you way. That was a great speech dad, thank you Vanguard. You will lead the way my son, yes father." At last the journey begins!
I need ideas for Chapter V anyone got any ideas
red_coats as himself 
Enelya_Palantir as herself 
DarkWolf998 as Shadow 
BennySkylar as Vanguards father 
Wolfdog2014 as Vanguard
Meanwhile back at the Xion Hospital, Benny was placed on his bed with Vanguard, Korino, and Enelya sitting right next to him. Then all of the sudden Benny wakes up and the kids looked in amazement to find Benny alive, "it's not possible" Benny said to his students, "I'm alive but-how I thought I was-" the doctor walks in with Benny's armor that had stab wound inside but inside shined a bright light that was inside the armor, "Well Mr. Skylar it's seems this armor is has a special plate designed by someone named Nava Skylar do you know anyone by that name sir?" Benny recognized that name and said, "Yes I do it belonged to father Nava for years, I thought he buried inside the sanctuary inside Aleu's room, I guess I was wrong." While everyone was taking care of Benny, Redcoat comes in, "guys! guys I heard that-oh everyone is already here, hey Redcoat don't worry I'm fine but can you do me a favor? Of course what is it? I need to make the same armor for my sons and Enelya with my fathers armor plating on it so that it protect them from Shadow and his clan. Sure thing old friend I'll get started on it right away I'll contact you when it's done, get well my friend." After a few months passed by Benny was able to make a full recovery after the fight with shadow, Korino was able to get a mechanical arm with sliver plating with Nava's plate of light inside it. Redcoat was waiting inside his shop until Benny, his sons, and Enelya came in, "Ah welcome my friends I just got the armor ready and special weapons that was able use with Nava's armor plating, these weapons can slay any darkness you may encounter especially Shadow himself. Thank you Redcoat for everything and I need you to come with us so we can stop Shadow once and for all and save my wife Aleu. Really Benny? Alright I'll go with in can help repair armor, weapons, and medical treatment when needed. Good now everyone get some sleep for tomorrow when the sun rises we journey to the other side of Xion and find Aleu before it is too late." Vanguard got his stuff packed but he worried on what happened to his mother but he knew had to strong for her and her Girlfriend if they are able to defeat Shadow and save the World from darkness that is coming. Benny got inside his speeder that was able hold everyone and everything on it. Benny got up and said to his sons, Enelya, and Redcoat "Today we start our journey toward Shadows domain, you all have special talents, skills, and courage by your side and mine, we will take what we have and journey across Xion until we find our friend, mother, and my wife Aleu. Remember that we always have eacother believe in yourself and you can conquer any darkness that comes you way. That was a great speech dad, thank you Vanguard. You will lead the way my son, yes father." At last the journey begins!
I need ideas for Chapter V anyone got any ideas
red_coats as himself 
Enelya_Palantir as herself 
DarkWolf998 as Shadow 
BennySkylar as Vanguards father 
Wolfdog2014 as Vanguard
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Unspecified / Any
another piece of constructive criticism :)
when using dialogue you should separate it from the text a bit more and make it more clear on who is saying what.
for example.
~Meanwhile back at the Xion Hospital, Benny was placed on his bed with Vanguard, Korino, and Enelya sitting right next to him. Then all of the sudden Benny wakes up and the kids looked in amazement to find Benny alive,
"it's not possible" Benny said to his students, "I'm alive but-how I thought I was-"
the doctor walks in with Benny's armor that had stab wound inside but inside shined a bright light that was inside the armor,
"Well Mr. Skylar," The Doctor began, "it's seems this armor is has a special plate designed by someone named Nava Skylar do you know anyone by that name sir?"
Benny recognized that name and said, "Yes I do it belonged to father Nava for years, I thought he buried inside the sanctuary inside Aleu's room, I guess I was wrong."~
when using dialogue you should separate it from the text a bit more and make it more clear on who is saying what.
for example.
~Meanwhile back at the Xion Hospital, Benny was placed on his bed with Vanguard, Korino, and Enelya sitting right next to him. Then all of the sudden Benny wakes up and the kids looked in amazement to find Benny alive,
"it's not possible" Benny said to his students, "I'm alive but-how I thought I was-"
the doctor walks in with Benny's armor that had stab wound inside but inside shined a bright light that was inside the armor,
"Well Mr. Skylar," The Doctor began, "it's seems this armor is has a special plate designed by someone named Nava Skylar do you know anyone by that name sir?"
Benny recognized that name and said, "Yes I do it belonged to father Nava for years, I thought he buried inside the sanctuary inside Aleu's room, I guess I was wrong."~
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