I just cant read this. I hate this. The friendship those friends put together is so precious. And you're ripping it apart. You're taking four seasons of friends and dashing it to pieces and saying "Don't worry, it'll all be good later." I can't handle it, and I cant get past the first few paragraphs.

Addressing both this and your comment on the picture, I apologize if the nature of this story is too much to bear. I can completely understand your feelings about the idea of friends breaking up because it's a deep-seated fear of mine as well, although in a way that's exactly what makes this story concept so compelling to me. I would argue that the friendship between the characters is exactly the reason people would want to see things through to the end where they come together again - they've done the same thing in the series itself several times where the main cast is split apart and have to work to patch things up between them. It hurts to see them broken, but when they pull through it just strengthens their bonds even further.

It's hard for me to say much without spoiling things for the series as a whole, but the most I can say is that it's not simply a matter of "everyone hates Rarity now". While this is the darkest chapter in the sense that it has the most fighting going on between the characters, it's not all just blind aggression, there's more to the circumstances going on behind the scenes, some of it is immediately apparent and other parts are only going to be revealed later. Rarity's treatment here is supposed to mirror the treatment she gave to Fluttershy during the previous chapter, and just like there when she immediately realizes that she acted wrongly (although not for the right reasons), Twilight has second thoughts about her actions toward Rarity after seeing how harshly she takes the idea that they aren't friends, and the future chapters are going to be substantially lighter in tone as Rarity works to overcome the dilemma she's been placed in. You may have an easier time reading the series after it's completed, when you won't have to sit on the cliffhangers at the end of each chapter and wait for me to finish the next one, but if you really don't want to read it I won't hold it against you.

I know, right? it tooooooootally SUCKS to read something you don't like! You know what else sucks? Having someone complain to you about something they do of their own free will. *hint* *hint*

So I shouldn't leave honest feedback to an author who appreciates honest criticism and opinion?

well, yeah...not if it's unnecessarily hurtful. believe me, If anyone knows what it feels like to be frustrated and disappointed by a story it's me, but I cant help felling like there's nothing he can really do with your comment. What can he say? "Oh I'm sorry you feel that way but I can't really take away your memory of reading it or change what I've already written so... " It just seems like you gain nothing by commenting as you did and probably caused only grief. Maybe if the tone of your comment was different it wouldn't have seemed so aggressive...I don't know. Probably the fact that everyone was ganging up on him also affected my response to your post but I don't hold you responsible for that. Whatever, do what you want I guess, I just don't know why you would WANT something like that...

sorry if I upset you further...

It's too cruel to enforce what you want to state, Would have been fine in a normal state of things where she gains weight and every attempt to get rid of it makes her larger. But this is too harsh to deal with...

Doesn't want me to have Rarity learn her lesson, It makes me what to choke a whale.

There isn't really much I can do to change things at this point because I already have the whole story thought out and every part is integral, but could you explain exactly what it is that makes you feel the story is pushing things too far? I don't feel that the conflict between friends alone is enough to completely catapult beyond the moral event horizon, so it must be some specific element of it. As I stated above, it's not like anyone just immediately gets mad at Rarity, they need to get pushed first, whether by accident or on purpose. Granted, I'm the author so I actually know the reason for the conflict that hasn't been explicitly revealed yet, so while it makes sense to me it might not be as clear for the reader. Looking back, the one thing that I will admit might be a little too harsh is Sweetie Belle yelling at Rarity, even considering that she too has her reasons for not liking her within the context of this story, and it's rather unnecessary from a narrative standpoint when the ending is basically the same kind of situation but better built up.

Looks like Rarity is on diffrent universe where her alter ego is much fat & love it to eating lots of food & drinking too

Maybe. >3> I'd say that that makes it sound a lot more lighthearted than the full situation really is though, there's a lot more going on with the other characters too.

I know what am I say. Thats why i say diffrent dimention or universe.

I'm not saying you were wrong, the "Rarity of this world likes being fat" part is more or less correct, but I'm just pointing out that there's a little more to it than that which will become more evident in future installments.

Yes indeed, and is not a Element of Generosity on that role is Trixie. Thats why she yelling to everypony who is not fat like herself.

I apologize if this sounds harsh, but I feel I need to comment about this. This is one of the worst fanfics of this subject matter I have ever read, for the reasons that the ponies appear so out of character, and everyone seems incredibly cruel and mean for no reason what-so-ever. As far as I can tell (and strictly speaking for this story alone, not even addressing the show stuff) Rarity has done nothing so incredibly mean to deserve such a thing. If anything, and I'm not saying it was, but this story appears to be written solely out of Rarity-hate, for the sake of bashing the pony. On top of that, so many other things seem out of place, like Twilight and Trixie being partners, that seems more like just having them together because people like them. Wouldn't Trixie still be a jerk? And honestly, Twilight also comes off as horribly nasty in this too, for no reason explained. It's what makes it come off as a hate-fic.

Unfortunately, unless you have plans to turn this out to be an insane nightmare, or that the pony from the beginning just wanted to ruin Rarity's life, there's not much to do that could redeem this. I almost don't want to see Rarity "learn a lesson", because so far, she appears to be the victim of all this, and I'd rather see everyone else redeemed. But as it comes across, it just appears to be a hate-filled Rarity bash fic.

The one thing I would suggest is to re-write this with a already mean-spirited character, like Gilda. That would make more sense. But Rarity is way too kind-hearted, and so, this just comes off as bad for that reason. I agree with BlinkofaStorm. This fic makes me want to go choke a whale.

I can guarantee you that this was absolutely not written with the intention of being a hatefic by any stretch of the imagination. Rarity is my favorite character in the series, I wouldn't do this just for the sake of bashing her, I simply feel that it isn't necessary to make every lesson be sugar-coated. The characters certainly aren't acting like they normally do, but that was intentional, there's a reason for why everything is different from the normal status-quo, the problem is just that none of those reasons have been made evident yet because this is still early on and a lot of things haven't been revealed yet so the readers don't know what's going on. I can explain things in greater detail if you would be willing to listen, although I would prefer to discuss such matters in notes as I don't want to publicly spoil the plot.

Sure, I'd be willing to listen.

Gosh, everybody be hatin' on your work, huh? well since everyone is making such an effort to tell you this sucks I figured I would make an effort to tell you it's great. I actually made an account on furaffinity just so I could tell you how great this is. Seriously, most of what I read is GARBAGE! It's like, dont you even know how to use spell-check? It's ridiculous! But I digress. Your work is so well written that I have been checking your page for updates ever since I found part 1. Also I LOVE how chill you are with all the negative comments. I would have just torn into everyone, saying "yes, well, the problem with your statement is that these are different characters. It's an alternate reality. Alternate realities = alternate personalities. Duh..." but your all "Well, thanks for the criticism. I'll be sure to take that into consideration next time! " I love it! keep up the good work and to all you haters out there, remember, if you disagree with me, you're probably either stupid or misinformed and in both cases I will not hesitate to ridicule your stupidity for my personal enjoyment. It'll be like watching America's Funniest Home Videos! Of course that's assuming I am correct. If not, you should have no trouble informing me of the full situation before subjecting me to your own forms of ridicule.

I think my heart preemptively skipped a beat when I first saw this message in my inbox, anticipating that it would be even more criticism. I don't begrudge any of the people who said they didn't like this because they all have legitimate reasons for saying what they did - I understand that a lot of things in this story aren't particularly clear in its current state, and that's largely my fault because I wasn't writing enough with how the audience will perceive the events going on in mind - but it was getting rather disconcerting just how many people were responding negatively, and in such a vehement manner, with not much positive to balance it out. Although, admittedly, this was the first time I'd ever gotten entirely negative feedback on anything I've written so it's not something I really know how to deal with.

So with all that being said, I was extremely and pleasantly surprised to actually look at the comment and find that it was far from being what I had expected. I'm flattered that you enjoy my work enough to be willing to make an account just to be able to comment on it, and it means a lot to me to know that there are people who enjoy this story despite its flaws. I do still plan on continuing this series and I think that the future chapters will vindicate any concerns that people had with this one...whenever I get around to working on any of my personal projects again.

Got some Sonata screenshots from Turnabout Storm.

Um...okay?

Random, but whatever. She's the best pony OC in my eyes.