A very nice first part, I see you found an ideal place for the cliff hanger.
My favorite part of this had to be in the conversation leading to the fight, which was well done of course but that part stood out to me.
I look forward to the upcoming parts you have in store.

Thanks Scale, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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That was quite entertaining. Very well put together, now go write da next one!

Thanks Ze, and it is written, I just need to write the one after that

:O you should totally post it. So I can read it. Like now.
now. Right now. In this moment now.

heh, you must've enjoyed it a lot, you must understand its my style to build suspense.

X/ I am prone to impatience. While I know that's why ye haven't posted it yet, I am, regardless, prone to impatience.

As am I, but fret not, I'll be uploading it soon enough.

GOOOOooooooooood... I look forward to it... :3

Thanks, I appreciate the enthusiasm. you know...I feel like kind of a jerk asking this, but if you liked the story a lot would you mind favoriting it? I know its just a number, but it means a lot to me when I see them.

XD omg I forgot to do that. I was seriously gonna, forgot though. Mah bad x3

That's alight, thanks again.

Once again Tycho, you have summoned up my enthusiasm for the next epic segment in Tycho's journeys and have currently left me feasting for more. An excellently written piece, full of raw emotion and several beauteous descriptions. Honestly there's not much else to say but, well done, can't wait for the next part.

I may want to point out that Tycho entering into a bar at the beginning is a tad repetitious of how you began Diamond Eyes, but honestly, this is an afterthought and is quickly overshadowed by the playing out of events. A few grammar errors here and there, nothing majorly concerning. However, I must point out that your word program has something against quotation marks, as in their place appear these strange symbols; but that's most likely the fault of the editor itself. Your paragraph placement has improved, though keep in mind that a new paragraph must always be made when a new speaker is introduced (we're fiction writers, normal formatting and structure are void in our presence ).

Another little issue I had was with the fight itself, or rather, the moment leading up to it. The hostility seemed to come just a LITTLE bit too sudden. Not like an unsuspected punch to the face, but the whole tone of the room seemed to shift into uneasiness right before the fight began just a tad too soon. Pacing is everything to me when making a story and I'm not saying yours is bad (quite the contrary in fact) I'm just saying before you were maintaining such a perfect level of subtle uneasiness among the environment and the sudden lurch before the bomb blew up seemed a little rushed. (It's-a-me! Bitchy nit-picker! ).

Other than that, awesome work. Really these issues are minor and don't affect the whole of the story. And hell, this is just the start. I love people like Nerrik and, while corny and over-the-top at times, he provides just enough sophisticated maliciousness to keep me invested, with just enough hatred towards him to feel the satisfaction of when Tycho burns his ass to a crisp. Wonderful villain. And damn, Tycho bit it hard this episode. Got a Lolita complex going on there?

Keep that pen in hand Magecat, at this rate, the demand for it will do nothing but grow.

Thanks for the insight Damien, I always appreciate feedback. I noticed something weird about the quotations as well, something I hope will be resolved by the next part. As for pacing, I can see what you mean a bit, but you must remember Tycho's a little hotheaded and Nerrik is...well...insane. Tycho has a lot of emotional baggage regarding his mother, and hearing Nerrik talk about her so disdainfully pushed him over the edge.

I'm glad to hear you like Nerrik as a villain though, I wanted him to function as a dark version of Tycho, savage, yet with a facsimile of refinement. Also possessing a greater understanding of magic, a deep seated affront to Tycho, as they both have shared lineage.

For the fight, I felt it was important to make it clear Tycho had no real chance of winning, but didn't want it totally one sided. One of my biggest concerns is ensuring that Tycho isn't viewed as overly powered and capable, he's still a kid after all.

Thanks again for sharing your opinion, and for favoriting the piece. I'm very glad you think this story has potential, I'm just as excited to work on it as you are to read it.