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Contains: A growing Pokemon girl, a fascinated bunny. - SFW.
Okay, so me and
stampy where talking about his Character Lumi, who's a Sneasel teenager, capable of growing when exposed to the cold. She has a very important role in her village and this got me thinking... Maybe other people see more in her than just a teenager with a special power? Me and Stampy tossed ideas back and forth and eventually, I settled on an outline for a story - I wrote it last month, on my flight to and from the US.
I hope you can enjoy it still and have a good day!
Big thanks to Stampy for the proof-reading and suggestions! :)
For those of you who prefer google docs: https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....it?usp=sharing
Okay, so me and
stampy where talking about his Character Lumi, who's a Sneasel teenager, capable of growing when exposed to the cold. She has a very important role in her village and this got me thinking... Maybe other people see more in her than just a teenager with a special power? Me and Stampy tossed ideas back and forth and eventually, I settled on an outline for a story - I wrote it last month, on my flight to and from the US.I hope you can enjoy it still and have a good day!
Big thanks to
Stampy for the proof-reading and suggestions! :)For those of you who prefer google docs: https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....it?usp=sharing
Category Story / Macro / Micro
Species Pokemon
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 36 kB
Thanks. Just wanted to make sure if this bunny is like say... your bunny OC, and if this Sneasel is in any way differently coloured to a normal one?
If I could give any sort of critic to this story, I'd say that the moment when the bear came out of no where was a bit... out of no where. I mean I suppose to go to the following scene, it'd make sense. I suppose if it was extended, it'd be a bit better.
Speaking of extension, I said that I was wondering if there'd be any kind of sequel, I personally would've liked if there was more interaction between Lumi and Caramel. Maybe have their friendship/relationship grow in like a full fledged story?
If I could give any sort of critic to this story, I'd say that the moment when the bear came out of no where was a bit... out of no where. I mean I suppose to go to the following scene, it'd make sense. I suppose if it was extended, it'd be a bit better.
Speaking of extension, I said that I was wondering if there'd be any kind of sequel, I personally would've liked if there was more interaction between Lumi and Caramel. Maybe have their friendship/relationship grow in like a full fledged story?
Stampy actually drew her a few times, so I'd like to direct you here: http://stampydragon.com/?char=Lumi&artist=all :) Caramel is just... Caramel-colored ^^ Floppy-eared - a typical bunny ^^
Yeah, a few people brought that up and it is a fair critique. I'll try to do that better next time. :) I will probably try my hand at a sequel as well at some point... I just need a fun plot for it! :)
Yeah, a few people brought that up and it is a fair critique. I'll try to do that better next time. :) I will probably try my hand at a sequel as well at some point... I just need a fun plot for it! :)
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