Very good stuff. I'd say the pacing was consistent and good. No real errors here. I'd say that the ending was a bit anti-climactic. It probably could've been extended into a... epilogue or something similar maybe.
Still, I enjoyed it. Keep up the great work. ^^

Thanks for the feedback! :) I am glad you liked it, since you helped inspiring it! And yeah, the ending was a bit short, but I couldn't really think of much standing in her way once she was that massive. :P

Well you put down sunbathing. Maybe it could've been overtime, she shrunk down while Caramel was still in her pocket and slowly got more compressed at a certain size, which at that point, he called out, and then have a short talk between the two? I don't know. Just a suggestion.

Or possibly have Caramel exit, having grown with her, and a bit surprised at his current size, since anyone in contact wit Lumi changes size with her...

I wanna see another one of Lumi accidentally growing REALLY huge, hehe1

lol, the epilogue will be fan written? XD Just like many interpretations of the aftermath.

Poor Caramel would be horribly confused by that turn of events. xD

I quite liked that, interesting growth method and a genuine reason for her having to do it, a goal to be acheived, nice. Buuuut, I think the supercold science center was kind of an easy way out of the problem. Especially given that there was already the glacier, which is itself a very cold thing. I was fully expecting her to rub up against it until she outgrew it. Or drink the ice-chilled snowmelt piled behind it, that was my first thought. So the science lab that makes super cold stuff kinda came out of nowhere. But still a cute story and its short and sweet enough that I still enjoyed it, well done :)

Thank you very much for reading! :D I was thinking of a solution like the one you suggested and tried writing it, but there where a few problems with that - for one, the problem with the glacier is that it's melting - so taking more cold from it may have made the situation worse before she'd have been big enough to stop it - especially with the sun shining on her back making it harder to grow. Then I kind of really wanted her to be truly truly massive at the end - like... Grown out of control kind of, instead of "just enough" to solve the crisis. And lastly, it was really kind of... Awkward to write that sort of action - so when I remembered that one X-Files Episode where they're stranded in one of the Ice core research labs in the arctic - I figured that would work okay. ^^; Not the most elegant solution, granted, but the best I could come up with. :P

Again, thanks so much for reading and taking the time to comment, I appreciate it a lot! :)

Very welcome, and I like that you thought up that considered it!

Commenting that I read this story and liked it :P

Thanks for reading and letting me know! :)

Apologies for the slow response here, but as I was reading and providing feedback as and when you were writing it, I think you know just how awesome I think this is!

In terms of the way it was written and put together, this one seemed to flow so much better than the first story, and while I’m certainly not saying the first one was bad (as it certainly wasn’t!), your writing style seemed a lot more solid this time around. The characters are fantastic and they get a lot more time to bond with one in the story. I love a lot of the subtle attempts from Caramel to get Lumi to grow (such as the “Hey, let’s get Ice Cream!”), but as in all good stories, growth saved the day!

Thanks so much for writing this though, you did a fantastic job with it!

It's quite cute, and nice to see Lumi rising!

Thanks for reading it! :D