I read it and it was pretty cool, a little rapid in its pace but stil great but I guess you did say this was on the message board and with a 400 character at a time limit things always get cut quick.

Did you ever enter it in the neopian times?

The character limit did this make tale a bit of a rapid one. However, I was still pleased with the results. My typical work is MUCH more wordy and descriptive then this and I enjoyed the challenge of trying to condense a decent story into such a small space.

As for the Neopain Times, I have not entered into it yet. I probably should at some point. Especially for how much I am trying to save up for a Draik Egg for my sister. I've been working on that goal for the past 3 years! :(

Draik egg!
How much are those at now anyways.... 2 or three mill at least
oh btw have you seen  chibiicap's neopet stuff yet?

Actually, yes. Chibiicap is perhaps the only other stable Neopian on here to my knowledge. I'd love to see more Neopian artwork on this site. Though, as I've found, Neopets aren't as well liked as other characters. <shrug>

Oh, at last check, Draik Eggs seem to now go for $7 Million. :( I'll be waiting an eternity to get one for my sis. Oh, well.

nice story, I agree with fatherfalcon a bit rushed but hey it was on a message board. I would like to see more stories from you^^

Thanks MJ. I've have to see about getting some more stuff up on here. I do have a large body of personal work that I've been working on for the past 9 years. However, I'm a tad bit timid about sharing it. I want to be perfect and hope to, one day, have it published as a body of work that readers both young and old can appreciate.

Thats cool if your just not ready to put up your writings, and good luck on having it published as well.

Thanks for the thoughts, MJ. After thinking about it, I have decided to throw out an early piece I have tweaked a number of times to keep it true to the world I have created. If you should find time to read it, I look forward to your thoughts.

Ehehe, awww, how fun! I was giggling and smiling when reading through it - the potion explosions sounded like fun! :D I really liked the faerie - very optimistic and cheery whether things are still simple and fun, or at a more dangerous point. (: She really interacted well with Zarra. I think you got in a good variety of adventures for a short story too - chemical fun, a big scary monster, and even a bit of humiliation on stage! (Well, not sure how humiliated she was, but she didn't seem to enjoy being booed.)
I don't mind the briefness of it either. It's a cute, simple little story and I can't wait to see what this adventure full of adventures inspired with your new work coming out. (:

<LoL!> Kayla's laboratory was my favorite scene to write. It allowed me, of all of them, to be the most playful with sound effects. :)

Here's a fun question for you? As a gamer yourself, have you ever played any of the "Resident Evil" titles? If so, did you ever know a book series was written about them by a fantastic writer by the name of S. D. Perry? Before I lost my reading vision, I gobbled up every one of books in the series I could and, in them, found the inspiration I needed to write out my sound effects. Before hand, I felt trapped in trying to spend line-after-line describing a lightning bolt or an opening door to the reader. Honestly, nothing is better suited for the job than a good ol' "KA-KA-RASH!" or "KA-REE-EE-EEK." Such sound effects are delightful in that they also let the reader have a better opportunity to visualize what is happening. :)

As you can tell by this story, Zarra is a bit annoyed, but content, with having a Baby Scorchio for a "Cousin." I am using the longer, fan-fic to show why this is and give a better description as to how a single, female Zafara could possibly be in charge of a toddler of a completely different species. So, through reading this, you have a strong idea as to what doors are available for opening in the bigger tale to come.

You're right! I think the sound effects were great, and surely playful too. I think I prefer it compared to a detailed sentence about it - sounds like you mentioned are short, quick, and don't take long to understand - while a couple sentences about it and what the character/narrator thinks about it doesn't seem as natural to me. Even if some might not think it's as professional, I know I prefer it like that. :D Reading's about imagining!
(Oh, I played the game once, but never knew about the books.)
Hehe, I think it's cool that we heard a bit about him here, and that he's more of a focus in your upcoming work! It's a nice little hint at what's to come. :3

I decided to start at the beginning of your works to read through them - hope you don't mind. :)

I can see how some might thing it moved too quickly, but personally that's not a big deal for me. To me it feels like a story for kindergarteners or something (although of course big kids could enjoy it too) and it wraps up really nice.

Wow! I wondered if anyone would ever read this story again.

I won a prize from Wizard's of the Coast for writing this story. They had a word limit and, well, I am not usually good with limitations. *Shrugs*

Looking back, it's amazing to think how far my writing has come since this tale. I'm still very proud of it, though, as I think I captured Neopets in a fun way.

*Hugs* Thanks for reading. :)