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I need some tips what I can make better and if everything (spelling and grammar) is correct. I am from Germany so I don't really have someone here how could give me tips. I am also open for criticism.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dog (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 17.4 kB
Much could be lost in translation, but this story suffers from what is called telling.
In writing a story you need to show through description. What do things look like? How do they feel? How do people feel on the inside? What do they look like? What do things smell like and taste like? In a anthropomorphic story these things are important in making the characters what they are.
First person (using I written from a characters point of view) is hard as you are stuck reflecting that persons point of view and need to show through their reactions.
You need to make paragraphs as people will have difficulty following your story.
Every new action or speaker create a new paragraph.
Best with the rest.
In writing a story you need to show through description. What do things look like? How do they feel? How do people feel on the inside? What do they look like? What do things smell like and taste like? In a anthropomorphic story these things are important in making the characters what they are.
First person (using I written from a characters point of view) is hard as you are stuck reflecting that persons point of view and need to show through their reactions.
You need to make paragraphs as people will have difficulty following your story.
Every new action or speaker create a new paragraph.
Best with the rest.
I didn't translate this from a older one to be honest. I feel more comfortable to write it without an German submission. After I read your commend I open my document and realized that I have to practice my English a lot as specially the structure of stories (a story written in German is different to what you describe for an English one).
Thank you for your tips. I'll revise that small part before I continue writing.
Have a nice day or in German: Noch einen schönen Tag.
Thank you for your tips. I'll revise that small part before I continue writing.
Have a nice day or in German: Noch einen schönen Tag.
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