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I wanted to elaborate on the scene a little more, make things clearer..for instance that the dude's in the car didn't die, but then there's only so much story you can cram onto one page...so
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I wanted to elaborate on the scene a little more, make things clearer..for instance that the dude's in the car didn't die, but then there's only so much story you can cram onto one page...so
Art and designs are © to iPoke
Category Artwork (Digital) / Comics
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 666 x 1000px
File Size 73.2 kB
You're gonna be mad at me...
---Comparing cells 1 and 9, I'm having a hard time seeing those two as the same truck. The first one has a large, flat back end like a semi, but the last one seems to be more like a Hummer in design. What what?
---I had trouble following the action in this strip, and I didn't really understand what had happened until the second or third time I read through it. I'm trying to piece together why this is, but I'm having trouble. I think it might be:
---The fourth cell shows the yellow tank quite well - but the grey hummer thing I cannot pick out. Is there a convoy of them? It looks like this might be the case with all the grey trucks going across the other highway. If this were true I might change the angle of cell 1 to show some/most of the convoy. This would help with the understanding quite a bit.
---The missile has a shockwave coming off the tip. It's moving faster than sound? o.O I remember discussing this with the anti-tank bullet, but for a missile it seems like overkill. The missile's exhaust in cells 6 and 7 both look very good, though, and the plasma thinger bullet is also quite believable.
---Both explosions are beautiful, I like the one in cell 9 a little better just because it seems viciously contained within the soft chewy center of the tank.
---Smoke in cell 11 is great, it's enough to show the vehicle is smoking but it's not distracting either.
I kind of wonder what happened to the rocket launcher man? He bailed from the Hummer... does he live? Does he die? Is he one of those Vin Diesel types who bails from vehicles about twice every 60 seconds?
---Comparing cells 1 and 9, I'm having a hard time seeing those two as the same truck. The first one has a large, flat back end like a semi, but the last one seems to be more like a Hummer in design. What what?
---I had trouble following the action in this strip, and I didn't really understand what had happened until the second or third time I read through it. I'm trying to piece together why this is, but I'm having trouble. I think it might be:
---The fourth cell shows the yellow tank quite well - but the grey hummer thing I cannot pick out. Is there a convoy of them? It looks like this might be the case with all the grey trucks going across the other highway. If this were true I might change the angle of cell 1 to show some/most of the convoy. This would help with the understanding quite a bit.
---The missile has a shockwave coming off the tip. It's moving faster than sound? o.O I remember discussing this with the anti-tank bullet, but for a missile it seems like overkill. The missile's exhaust in cells 6 and 7 both look very good, though, and the plasma thinger bullet is also quite believable.
---Both explosions are beautiful, I like the one in cell 9 a little better just because it seems viciously contained within the soft chewy center of the tank.
---Smoke in cell 11 is great, it's enough to show the vehicle is smoking but it's not distracting either.
I kind of wonder what happened to the rocket launcher man? He bailed from the Hummer... does he live? Does he die? Is he one of those Vin Diesel types who bails from vehicles about twice every 60 seconds?
Heh...no, no, I see your points, but then you're missing the point of the page with the first comment
- They aren#t the same truck...what's shown in the first panel is the vehicle the convoy is supposed to protect. there is an idication of a vehicle infront of the truck, but at this size it's not visible (thi sisn't supposed to be the final format anyway)
- Yes, there's trouble from following the action, but that's from cramming too much story onto one page
- Again, a problem with the size, as the little indicators I put in for the transports and trucks don't show up
- The shockwave ont eh rocket was an unnecessary addition, but then comics need to overdramatize a little to gain strength...I didn't quite decide to put it in until the last second, so it's just there for the fun of it...glad you like the exhaust/plasma though...had horrendous trouble making it look like I wanted it to >.O
- I actually preferr the second explosion, but then that's just me and I have yet to draw other, more interesting ones
- I wasn't all certain about the smoke, but I'm glad it comes over enough...next challenge = heat waves
The last point is something I didn't manage to cram onto the page anymore ;3 as I said, there's only so much story for one page
Thanks again for the analysis =^-^=
- They aren#t the same truck...what's shown in the first panel is the vehicle the convoy is supposed to protect. there is an idication of a vehicle infront of the truck, but at this size it's not visible (thi sisn't supposed to be the final format anyway)
- Yes, there's trouble from following the action, but that's from cramming too much story onto one page
- Again, a problem with the size, as the little indicators I put in for the transports and trucks don't show up
- The shockwave ont eh rocket was an unnecessary addition, but then comics need to overdramatize a little to gain strength...I didn't quite decide to put it in until the last second, so it's just there for the fun of it...glad you like the exhaust/plasma though...had horrendous trouble making it look like I wanted it to >.O
- I actually preferr the second explosion, but then that's just me and I have yet to draw other, more interesting ones
- I wasn't all certain about the smoke, but I'm glad it comes over enough...next challenge = heat waves
The last point is something I didn't manage to cram onto the page anymore ;3 as I said, there's only so much story for one page
Thanks again for the analysis =^-^=
I know what you mean, air units are rather unballanced and for most units theres no incentive to use the light or medium versions of them most of the time, but I don't have a huge variety of those kinda games sadly, most of my collection is DoW and the C&C series (which I'm crap at, but I still love it anyway)
I think I can follow the action well enough.
First panel: APC followed by truck, intro.
panel 2: Enemy yellow hovertank.
panel 3: Guy in APC gets his rocket launcher.
panel 4: Traffic, targets aim at one another.
panel 5/6: Rocket guy and hovertank fire simultaneously.
panel 7: the rocket.
panel 8: rocket and energy blast pass by each other.
panel 9: Hovertank goes boom!
panel 10: APC is barely missed, guy falls out. (Not dead, as you've said.)
Last panel: APC half turned over. ( Or as some people put it: "Doing a barrel roll." :P )
Cool action comic though; one sweet little detail I liked was the rubble in the air of the last panel along with the smoke.
First panel: APC followed by truck, intro.
panel 2: Enemy yellow hovertank.
panel 3: Guy in APC gets his rocket launcher.
panel 4: Traffic, targets aim at one another.
panel 5/6: Rocket guy and hovertank fire simultaneously.
panel 7: the rocket.
panel 8: rocket and energy blast pass by each other.
panel 9: Hovertank goes boom!
panel 10: APC is barely missed, guy falls out. (Not dead, as you've said.)
Last panel: APC half turned over. ( Or as some people put it: "Doing a barrel roll." :P )
Cool action comic though; one sweet little detail I liked was the rubble in the air of the last panel along with the smoke.
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