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The story of a stallion who, on a journey to find himself, finds love. This story is unfinished at the moment.
It may actually be about halfway done now!!! YAY!
It may actually be about halfway done now!!! YAY!
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Horse
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 52.2 kB
I am assuming this is the story you want me to give you my thought.
I liked it. It was well written and I could feel the emotions. There is a few misspelling around but nothing spell check can't help. I do feel like the paragraphs need to be split. you always start a new paragraph with dialogue unless it is finishing or accompanying the dialogue. Really, I didn't feel like it was too bad. however, I am not very good at giving advice about stories. I hope this helps at least.
I liked it. It was well written and I could feel the emotions. There is a few misspelling around but nothing spell check can't help. I do feel like the paragraphs need to be split. you always start a new paragraph with dialogue unless it is finishing or accompanying the dialogue. Really, I didn't feel like it was too bad. however, I am not very good at giving advice about stories. I hope this helps at least.
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