Intriguing...

I'd been thinking about "The Things They Carried" recently. Does it show? :)

Just a little. >^_^< I've actually never read that, though I've read enough excerpts of it to see the similarity. Need to add that one to my reading list.

I've only read the short story, but I definitely recommend it. It's apparently one of the most anthologized American short stories out there.

Hmm. odd. It works tho.

I can totally see, in this small space, the bigger story you've told with such few words. So simple, yet hinting at so much more and so many emotions that it's hard process them all with the limited vocabulary.

Minimalistic to perfection. Very nice.

Artistic. Modern. I'm completely lost what happens here. Maybe she is a vegetarian and suffers to see so much meat? Perhaps she is cleaning the house of dead relative and cries for the memories? Maybe she doesn't like carrying carbage away? Any way, very intriguing story, quite bold move to give so little to the reader, I presume many can't think on their own and you get very few or very confused comments. Nice little piece.

I love this! It'll be poking me in the back of the head all day. Very strong in the provocation of wondering what else is unwritten. Just enough, not too much. Perfect amount for me. The absence, or voids in the fabric of a story when placed naturally and/or artfully are my favorite parts of written word. Thanks Mal!

Hey, thanks. There are some clues in there as to what *I* was thinking about, but one of my intentions in this piece was to let the reader also build their stories around what's written. The inspiration, if you want to call it that, is in thinking how inanimate objects gain meaning from the contexts we place around them... like, that t-shirt you were wearing the day you got the news that your favorite grandfather died is then linked to that feeling.

But hey, I wrote it quickly. If it conveys meaning to people, then that's great and really all I ask. :)

Hmm, I like how you made this purposefully vague! Well done. That was an interesting read. It makes you wonder why she was clearing out her pantry.

Short but most times these short ones really tickle the mind. This one is no exception, very well done.

My mind is currently swimming in ideas as to what could be going on here. I think that's a good thing.

I think so too! :)

very very unique... I have cleaned out a kitchen like that once... not a pretty picture...

V.

This spurs me to just start writing about her...

Feel free! I don't have anything else planned for her. :)

Very well done. The beginning lures you in, and the ending just grabs hold of you. You feel it.

Wow! Very impressive writing. You don't see a piece like this every day. :3