haha I have one like this from way back 'Whistling Reds'

Too often, writing bitter results in repetition without cadence
Like judo, you pull in with soft before the punch

In "Understanding Poetry" Cleanth Brooks showed me
how by placing a poem in a rhythm
the words that accent OFF the beat stand out from the scene
So you have the big picture
And the key words (focus) within

(I am guilty too) Too often the rhyme and repeating roll over the ideas

Thought, the last verse is quite good, breaking off from the rest
Much more reflective and essaying