
A fairly strict Iambic Pentameter with a mostly ABAB rhyme scheme. Fairly taut formality, in other words-- really doing anything else would have been distractingly ironic. It's not that I'm a meter nazi. In fact there're a couple real breakdowns in my meter here, extra points for spotting them.
I'm quite pleased with the steady but positive confrontation that comes out in this poem; that wasn't an accident and I didn't say anything I didn't mean. It will piss off 40% of people who claim to like or write poetry. Understand though that it's not just an argument, it's a plea, a battle-cry, a final call, because poetry is NOT just anything you want it to be, and aesthetics is NOT purely subjective, and knowing this MATTERS, at least for the sake of writing poetry.
I really have not decided entirely how to order stanzas 3 through 7-- they're certainly a coherent whole for me, but I'm not totally confident about they way they seem to jump around. I'm also wondering if I shouldn't take stanzas 6 and 7 out and make them a companion poem. Except they go to a point I really want to make here.
I'm quite pleased with the steady but positive confrontation that comes out in this poem; that wasn't an accident and I didn't say anything I didn't mean. It will piss off 40% of people who claim to like or write poetry. Understand though that it's not just an argument, it's a plea, a battle-cry, a final call, because poetry is NOT just anything you want it to be, and aesthetics is NOT purely subjective, and knowing this MATTERS, at least for the sake of writing poetry.
I really have not decided entirely how to order stanzas 3 through 7-- they're certainly a coherent whole for me, but I'm not totally confident about they way they seem to jump around. I'm also wondering if I shouldn't take stanzas 6 and 7 out and make them a companion poem. Except they go to a point I really want to make here.
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Some of the amateurs don't yet know or understand proper meter. Perhaps you should take up a job teaching those who'd really like to learn. I know I would, but I know from reading this poem, it seems that some who know, would rather piss on the less fortunate, than help them become. You shouldn't down someone because they don't know, you should respect them for what they present...yeah, some of them have no girth to what they write, no meaning, just random sorrowful garbage; some actually try.
Grammar vs. Art
Grammar does not bring about,
The sensualism found in art.
The picture that is painted by
It, where a reader finds their pride.
If you would only take your time;
Convey the message on your mind,
When written out you may just find,
The average person doesn't mind,
Two lines that end with mind for rhyme.
----4nd 1F Y4 $71ll d0(\)T 8EL13V3 M3 TRY IT!!!!!!!!
Grammar does not bring about,
The sensualism found in art.
The picture that is painted by
It, where a reader finds their pride.
If you would only take your time;
Convey the message on your mind,
When written out you may just find,
The average person doesn't mind,
Two lines that end with mind for rhyme.
----4nd 1F Y4 $71ll d0(\)T 8EL13V3 M3 TRY IT!!!!!!!!
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