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RandallShepherd
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I just had to go back and re-write this part. I thought it was all good, but going back, I found so many mistakes. A big one was that I was inconsistent on the point of view. Originally it was written in third person, but then changed to first person, and then BACK to third person. There were glaring issues that occurred with those changes. Also, the tense was inconsistent, going from past tense to present tense and then back to past tense.
Any feedback would be amazing :) Part three is currently being written and should be done soon! Thanks :)
Fun Fact: Almost all characters in this story have last names that correlate with their personality. "Cole" means warrior. "Trinette" means innocent little.
RandallShepherd______________________________________________________
I just had to go back and re-write this part. I thought it was all good, but going back, I found so many mistakes. A big one was that I was inconsistent on the point of view. Originally it was written in third person, but then changed to first person, and then BACK to third person. There were glaring issues that occurred with those changes. Also, the tense was inconsistent, going from past tense to present tense and then back to past tense.
Any feedback would be amazing :) Part three is currently being written and should be done soon! Thanks :)
Fun Fact: Almost all characters in this story have last names that correlate with their personality. "Cole" means warrior. "Trinette" means innocent little.
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