Ur high ^^

GJ!

thanks rudd! anyhting in particular you liked about it? i might be able to expand on it.

With the exception of a few conventions... wait... everyone hates a Grammer Nazi O.o...

Know what? I dunno? I'm no good at editing. ^^

looks good so far

thanks, already starting to integrate you into it. might have the first two chapters offically finished here pretty quick.

i saw ehehehe

Looking good, nicely updated.

Yay for the media guy, hes funny.

Yeah, Luis might end up killing hims or somethin. what did ya think about me gettin stabbed? was it expected? and were there any other parts you liked. might want to expand on them.

hrm.

It was fairly interesting throughout.

Dont forget to balance your action.

All dialogue must have a reason to be there. It has to do something, be it forwarding plot, creating emotion, charecter depth, etc etc.

Oh, and if your not editing chapters you should post chapters sperately, or in the explanation post state what chapter has been updated so people can get straight to it, rather than re-reading 20 chapters to find only 1 chapter was edited.

all i can think of at the moment

Thanks, will do that in the future.

Didn't see you getting stabbed comin...lol...story looks good so far..

thanks man. ^^

i don't have microsoft word anymore, but from the looks of it it looks alright, though the dream state kinda through me off...but nice work so far

yeah, i couldn't figure out what to do then. i thought that might become useful later on. but i also might delete that whole phase altogether. what'd you think Luis?

pritty awesome in my book. i don't think the whole "random vision upon sudden death" thing works in very well, less these wolvin tribes are some sort of mythical tribe.

oh yeah btw, cudos for giving me a MA-5C assault rifle.

oh yeah and it's MA-5C not MA5K.
i looked it up

well i was using the one for the books. if i remember right the SPARTAN III soldiers, which don't exist int he game verse, use cut down versions known as the MA-5K they don't look much like MAs. i think. but i'll change for that sake, since i'm probably wrong.

yeah i thought i saw something like that, it did look like a cut down version, but i thought you were ectually talking about the original assault rifle.

don matter. i might just think up a new one and give it to ya when the squad filters back through where the battalion got wipe out. maybe i'll jut give ya the jackhammer i found or somethin. don really know yet.