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Thursday Prompt- Parenting is Sometimes Like Oil and Water.
Prepare for a story about a male Gryphon that comes home to an unexpected scene.
Nearly a week after the authoring of the previous Thursday prompt comes this piece. Unfortunately, I haven't spent much time editing this piece as I would like and I still feel that's it's pretty unfinished. I suppose what I'm looking for in terms of criticism would be how it reads, what exactly you're getting from the characters etc., I can improve images and details later.
Nearly a week after the authoring of the previous Thursday prompt comes this piece. Unfortunately, I haven't spent much time editing this piece as I would like and I still feel that's it's pretty unfinished. I suppose what I'm looking for in terms of criticism would be how it reads, what exactly you're getting from the characters etc., I can improve images and details later.
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Size 120 x 114px
File Size 9 kB
Interesting. I have a slight difficulties to approach your story, as none of the characters are easy for me to relate. The protagonist seems shelfish and self-centered, even a bit blind and unemotional, he isn't really very easy character to symphatize with. His wife isn't better, I feel sorry for the poor woman, but it strikes me as something utterly stupid to adopt two children of another species. There weren't more than these two characters, which in its own accord is something really great, the story doesn't really need more characters, so why waste your time to create something you don't need.
The themes and motives of the story are quite down-to-earth, realistic, which is a pleasent surprise, as most of the fiction I have come across here at FA has been usually escapistic. People are more willing to read fantasy and sink into another world, rather than replacing their own problems with some other problems some characters encounter in some story.
Anyway, the story is very well written, well built, there is a real beginning, middle and ending, although the ending is an open one. But, the little tale is a perfect short story on its own. Great little piece, I enjoyed reading this.
The themes and motives of the story are quite down-to-earth, realistic, which is a pleasent surprise, as most of the fiction I have come across here at FA has been usually escapistic. People are more willing to read fantasy and sink into another world, rather than replacing their own problems with some other problems some characters encounter in some story.
Anyway, the story is very well written, well built, there is a real beginning, middle and ending, although the ending is an open one. But, the little tale is a perfect short story on its own. Great little piece, I enjoyed reading this.
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