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I know this one is late. You would not believe the month I just had. But at the moment, it's 7:30am. I worked all day to get this one complete, but more on that in a bit.
First of all, no naughty scenes in this one. There is a bit of nudity, but nothing really sexual. So, sorry to disappoint.
To be completely honest, this chapter was just not in me. I felt like I struggled all month to get it done, get it complete before the 31st. But time and time again, I felt exhausted just trying to do it. Worrying about the deadline and wanting to get it finished by then.
Deadline, Bartan?
Yeah... I was trying a little self experiment on Light Escapes. Wondering, if I somehow did writing as a profession, to see if I could make deadlines. My goal for this one was 60+ pages every 30 days or so. Which would be an Act every month. I was just wondering if I could possibly bring myself to do it, getting my habits in order, and just having that goal to work on. But from the doctor visits, the travels, to computer problems, and a friend of mine having a very harsh breakdown... Life just caught up too much with me that it turned out to be a few days late.
And I know that a few days isn't anything really to worry about. But I really felt like... I didn't want to write it. And by forcing myself to attempt this "work ethic" I felt like the story itself really suffered. It felt rushed, unpolished and unrefined. I felt like there were pieces missing, scenes that I wanted in but had to cut. Even an entire side-story or two to explain some things. But it all got cut. The story (should) still make sense, but there's unexplained holes in it that I really wanted to fill. Let alone the main premise that I wanted to state: Whereas Skyline really didn't have an Ingame Story, the story itself was your adventure. Your own life within it. It's just something that I... Never really got to explain or fit in.
*Sigh* Perhaps writing isn't really a line of work for me. I'll still do it, because I like doing it. But... No more of these deadlines for me. No more mental or self promises that I'll get a steady amount of content out. I'll just write when I feel like it, and it'll complete when it completes. Until then, I just need to sleep.
The good thing in all this is, that Light Escapes actually ended in a rather opened way, so I won't say that this is the last issue. It can be, but at the same time... I might come back to it. Maybe finally fill some of these holes that I left behind. Also, a few characters were actually the idea of Silent Moonlight Dragon. Thanks for the idea there, it made this a little bit more fun.
As for the music, Sky is by Annisokay. Another screamo band that I've been listening to occasionally, but this song... It just holds something within. Maybe it's the idea of Loss and being determined enough, defiant enough to get it back by any means. I was actually going to call it Psycho-Pass, after the anime's track (of the same name). But Sky came out of nowhere and well... I felt like it really fit. I still call it about a 3/5 on the Vocal scale (quite a bit of clean vocals in it as well that really make the song), but listen to it at your own risk.
Light Escapes © Dangerkids
Sky © Annisokay
As for upcoming writings, I have two ideas that are brewing. Have been for a while now. I was trying to see if I could possibly merge them, but I don't see it really fitting well enough to do it. So be on the lookout for Destruction Preventer and Red Hypergiant in the future. I hope to get at least one of them done before the year is up. Until then, it's now 8am. Good... "Night."
First of all, no naughty scenes in this one. There is a bit of nudity, but nothing really sexual. So, sorry to disappoint.
To be completely honest, this chapter was just not in me. I felt like I struggled all month to get it done, get it complete before the 31st. But time and time again, I felt exhausted just trying to do it. Worrying about the deadline and wanting to get it finished by then.
Deadline, Bartan?
Yeah... I was trying a little self experiment on Light Escapes. Wondering, if I somehow did writing as a profession, to see if I could make deadlines. My goal for this one was 60+ pages every 30 days or so. Which would be an Act every month. I was just wondering if I could possibly bring myself to do it, getting my habits in order, and just having that goal to work on. But from the doctor visits, the travels, to computer problems, and a friend of mine having a very harsh breakdown... Life just caught up too much with me that it turned out to be a few days late.
And I know that a few days isn't anything really to worry about. But I really felt like... I didn't want to write it. And by forcing myself to attempt this "work ethic" I felt like the story itself really suffered. It felt rushed, unpolished and unrefined. I felt like there were pieces missing, scenes that I wanted in but had to cut. Even an entire side-story or two to explain some things. But it all got cut. The story (should) still make sense, but there's unexplained holes in it that I really wanted to fill. Let alone the main premise that I wanted to state: Whereas Skyline really didn't have an Ingame Story, the story itself was your adventure. Your own life within it. It's just something that I... Never really got to explain or fit in.
*Sigh* Perhaps writing isn't really a line of work for me. I'll still do it, because I like doing it. But... No more of these deadlines for me. No more mental or self promises that I'll get a steady amount of content out. I'll just write when I feel like it, and it'll complete when it completes. Until then, I just need to sleep.
The good thing in all this is, that Light Escapes actually ended in a rather opened way, so I won't say that this is the last issue. It can be, but at the same time... I might come back to it. Maybe finally fill some of these holes that I left behind. Also, a few characters were actually the idea of Silent Moonlight Dragon. Thanks for the idea there, it made this a little bit more fun.
As for the music, Sky is by Annisokay. Another screamo band that I've been listening to occasionally, but this song... It just holds something within. Maybe it's the idea of Loss and being determined enough, defiant enough to get it back by any means. I was actually going to call it Psycho-Pass, after the anime's track (of the same name). But Sky came out of nowhere and well... I felt like it really fit. I still call it about a 3/5 on the Vocal scale (quite a bit of clean vocals in it as well that really make the song), but listen to it at your own risk.
Light Escapes © Dangerkids
Sky © Annisokay
As for upcoming writings, I have two ideas that are brewing. Have been for a while now. I was trying to see if I could possibly merge them, but I don't see it really fitting well enough to do it. So be on the lookout for Destruction Preventer and Red Hypergiant in the future. I hope to get at least one of them done before the year is up. Until then, it's now 8am. Good... "Night."
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Hi Bartan,
No need to apologize to post stories somewhat later, and even if this story feels incomplete to you, it was still great at the very least! Sad to hear things where difficult for you, I hope the very best for you!
I liked the way the events build up, and how everything turned out. Written with humor, action, serious themes and all the like. And of course brining Zhai and Khol in the mix created funny/awkward moments. The battle scenes were great as always; followable and also unpredictable (which is always good!). I thought it was nice how you described a bit the bond formed of the guild members and the importance of that as motivation to get everything done.
The back story of Endzeit was also nicely presented, also touching a bit of the subject to what makes something a living being. The purpose and all of it decided by itself; which is still more complicated than that..
I also liked how you did the ending, concluding some loose ends with Trisha's real life; a bit sad about what happened with her. But as you said last time; if she is more happy in this situation, then what can you say.
And it was a good ending for her in-game adventure. Maybe the pace was a bit fast at the end, however it did not really felt incomplete. There was maybe a small gap between chapter 6 and the final chapter. Not really clear about what exactly happened (in the purgotary/ which did me think a bit of a program's garbage collector of e.g. Java; where objects/data is freed from the memory to OS only when needed and at end of program execution), but at least everything became fine (an escaping route was probably found via the console or via Nathan).
I recently watched the 25 episodes of SAO, and could see how it could serve as inspiration; and what kind of situations could be created with such VR worlds. The similarities were quite nice, and I think the soul reviving bit was a very nice one. But still, you kept your own style into it.
I will just wait patiently for the next story, the described titles/names sound interesting, and I am sure you will manage something great again. Sorry for being a bit late, spend too much time trying to watch some anime series and stuff. Take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
No need to apologize to post stories somewhat later, and even if this story feels incomplete to you, it was still great at the very least! Sad to hear things where difficult for you, I hope the very best for you!
I liked the way the events build up, and how everything turned out. Written with humor, action, serious themes and all the like. And of course brining Zhai and Khol in the mix created funny/awkward moments. The battle scenes were great as always; followable and also unpredictable (which is always good!). I thought it was nice how you described a bit the bond formed of the guild members and the importance of that as motivation to get everything done.
The back story of Endzeit was also nicely presented, also touching a bit of the subject to what makes something a living being. The purpose and all of it decided by itself; which is still more complicated than that..
I also liked how you did the ending, concluding some loose ends with Trisha's real life; a bit sad about what happened with her. But as you said last time; if she is more happy in this situation, then what can you say.
And it was a good ending for her in-game adventure. Maybe the pace was a bit fast at the end, however it did not really felt incomplete. There was maybe a small gap between chapter 6 and the final chapter. Not really clear about what exactly happened (in the purgotary/ which did me think a bit of a program's garbage collector of e.g. Java; where objects/data is freed from the memory to OS only when needed and at end of program execution), but at least everything became fine (an escaping route was probably found via the console or via Nathan).
I recently watched the 25 episodes of SAO, and could see how it could serve as inspiration; and what kind of situations could be created with such VR worlds. The similarities were quite nice, and I think the soul reviving bit was a very nice one. But still, you kept your own style into it.
I will just wait patiently for the next story, the described titles/names sound interesting, and I am sure you will manage something great again. Sorry for being a bit late, spend too much time trying to watch some anime series and stuff. Take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Thank you once again Silent. Even when I feel like I haven't really done a good job (due to events), you still find a way to turn that feeling around. And I really needed that after this month
Again, I'm very relieved and glad you enjoyed this act. Still, I felt the same way about the pace and it being a bit too fast towards the ending. I think I was just in such a rush to put it behind me that I wanted to end it as soon as I could. That way, I could feel like it was "Complete" and therefore actually get some sleep (My brain is weird sometimes).
Sometimes, Bartan?
Ahem. about the purgatory thing, I think I actually missed a paragraph describing it faintly. It was suppose to be pitch black, with the sounds of the other creatures stirring around. And that's why there really wasn't a separate chapter for the events within it (I dropped the ball on that one. Something I'll get around to fixing soon). The idea was, that though they really had no chance at getting out, they made it out because they were together. And well, you got a good idea there about Nathan possibly finding them and helping them to safety.
The idea of it was supposed to be left very vague, letting the reader almost come up with some middle ground of what exactly happened, and hinting at an ending. They did this a lot in an old game called The Suffering (one of my favorites, to be honest), Where you would almost enter a prison cell and hear a ghostly whisper saying something "That little girl wasn't so innocent... After I was done." And it just gave this amazing/dark feeling of you knowing what happened, after just one simple sentence. I fell in love with the game because of how often it did this for you.
Anyway, I thought Endzeit's background was something a bit new that I would try. I was originally going to spread it out among the chapters, but then I felt like it was going to reveal too much (mostly something was specifically going to happen to him that would cause him to be seeing this. And how no one seemed to even acknowledge he was there would give the impression that maybe he was dead). So I stuck it all in one chapter, and I'm kinda glad I did.
As for the Faction mates coming together and helping Sarious in the end, I really wanted to expand that up a bit more before the event of her relying on them. Showing that she was doing more/alot for them, but hardly taking anything. But it was more of a plot for a series than a... "Novel" I guess? I'm not really sure what to call some of these stories
But I suppose almost everything worked out. Again, I don't like how it was rushed (I didn't even get a chance to re-read it before posting), but I'm content with the try. I might even make a separate story for the events in Purgatory someday. Or even just add in some flashbacks. Again, it's very opened for now, but my plate at the moment is full when it comes to stories. I've been working on one (more than I planned to, really) but I can't give a deadline when it will be done. However, DitD issue 10 finally got released recently, so feel free to look into that.
SAO was a good anime for those who've experienced an MMO for themselves. Those who haven't... Actually might think Kirito's lead role might be a bit stupid or... (What's the word I'm looking for...) It's like the writer is trying to make the main character too likable or trying too hard to make them cool (with next to no flaws). But really, they're mostly just seeing the in-game version of him, and hardly considering the real life version. Long story short: people who often play online games (or video games in general) are, more often than not, trying to be something that they are not. And alot of that tends to have to do with "Power" (in a very loose term).
But I'll stop there before this becomes a speech If you were looking for a few suggestions for animes (though I'm sure you've either heard of these or already got enough to watch), look into Code Geass and Psycho Pass. They're both rather interesting and tend to have very smart lead characters rather than brash ones.
Alright, this was a nice break, but I'm going back to do some reading. Thank you very much again, Silent. And I hope you enjoy the rest of your summer!
Again, I'm very relieved and glad you enjoyed this act. Still, I felt the same way about the pace and it being a bit too fast towards the ending. I think I was just in such a rush to put it behind me that I wanted to end it as soon as I could. That way, I could feel like it was "Complete" and therefore actually get some sleep (My brain is weird sometimes).
Sometimes, Bartan?
Ahem. about the purgatory thing, I think I actually missed a paragraph describing it faintly. It was suppose to be pitch black, with the sounds of the other creatures stirring around. And that's why there really wasn't a separate chapter for the events within it (I dropped the ball on that one. Something I'll get around to fixing soon). The idea was, that though they really had no chance at getting out, they made it out because they were together. And well, you got a good idea there about Nathan possibly finding them and helping them to safety.
The idea of it was supposed to be left very vague, letting the reader almost come up with some middle ground of what exactly happened, and hinting at an ending. They did this a lot in an old game called The Suffering (one of my favorites, to be honest), Where you would almost enter a prison cell and hear a ghostly whisper saying something "That little girl wasn't so innocent... After I was done." And it just gave this amazing/dark feeling of you knowing what happened, after just one simple sentence. I fell in love with the game because of how often it did this for you.
Anyway, I thought Endzeit's background was something a bit new that I would try. I was originally going to spread it out among the chapters, but then I felt like it was going to reveal too much (mostly something was specifically going to happen to him that would cause him to be seeing this. And how no one seemed to even acknowledge he was there would give the impression that maybe he was dead). So I stuck it all in one chapter, and I'm kinda glad I did.
As for the Faction mates coming together and helping Sarious in the end, I really wanted to expand that up a bit more before the event of her relying on them. Showing that she was doing more/alot for them, but hardly taking anything. But it was more of a plot for a series than a... "Novel" I guess? I'm not really sure what to call some of these stories
But I suppose almost everything worked out. Again, I don't like how it was rushed (I didn't even get a chance to re-read it before posting), but I'm content with the try. I might even make a separate story for the events in Purgatory someday. Or even just add in some flashbacks. Again, it's very opened for now, but my plate at the moment is full when it comes to stories. I've been working on one (more than I planned to, really) but I can't give a deadline when it will be done. However, DitD issue 10 finally got released recently, so feel free to look into that.
SAO was a good anime for those who've experienced an MMO for themselves. Those who haven't... Actually might think Kirito's lead role might be a bit stupid or... (What's the word I'm looking for...) It's like the writer is trying to make the main character too likable or trying too hard to make them cool (with next to no flaws). But really, they're mostly just seeing the in-game version of him, and hardly considering the real life version. Long story short: people who often play online games (or video games in general) are, more often than not, trying to be something that they are not. And alot of that tends to have to do with "Power" (in a very loose term).
But I'll stop there before this becomes a speech If you were looking for a few suggestions for animes (though I'm sure you've either heard of these or already got enough to watch), look into Code Geass and Psycho Pass. They're both rather interesting and tend to have very smart lead characters rather than brash ones.
Alright, this was a nice break, but I'm going back to do some reading. Thank you very much again, Silent. And I hope you enjoy the rest of your summer!
Hey Bartan,
You're very much welcome!
I can see why you would want to finish things just for the sake of getting it done. Hope everything will go better for you now!
You could certainly say everything worked out, and maybe you could add in some more story information into a small revision or something. And good to hear you're busy writing. Take as much time as you need! Will probably getting it busy in about a couple of weeks, so I will be some less active at checking this site. And thanks for the heads-up about DitD!
About SAO, mm maybe Kirito's role might be made a bit too likelable; but still it wasn't way too overdone :-P. But you're right they did not really cover that subject of being someone else and I'm seeing your point
Thanks for your recommendations! Psycho Pass was also recommended by a friend of mine, so now I will certainly watch it! And the other one will be added to a list of recommendations which I got .
Take care, and good luck with your writings and everything else! And too you the same; enjoy the rest of your summer!
You're very much welcome!
I can see why you would want to finish things just for the sake of getting it done. Hope everything will go better for you now!
You could certainly say everything worked out, and maybe you could add in some more story information into a small revision or something. And good to hear you're busy writing. Take as much time as you need! Will probably getting it busy in about a couple of weeks, so I will be some less active at checking this site. And thanks for the heads-up about DitD!
About SAO, mm maybe Kirito's role might be made a bit too likelable; but still it wasn't way too overdone :-P. But you're right they did not really cover that subject of being someone else and I'm seeing your point
Thanks for your recommendations! Psycho Pass was also recommended by a friend of mine, so now I will certainly watch it! And the other one will be added to a list of recommendations which I got .
Take care, and good luck with your writings and everything else! And too you the same; enjoy the rest of your summer!
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