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A group of Neodogs stumble across a strange ship that seems to be abandoned. Unfortunately while checking the place out it reactivates and accidentally draws the attention of some aliens that are hunting them.
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This is the full story that resulted from the 11/6/2008 Thursday Prompt. It got... um... LONG. One week to write and one to edit. About 24 pages long.
Right now I am very happy with it, although I expect in six months I will find all sorts of things I want to do differently. Was a nice break from Rohai.
Oh, and for reference 1 Galactic Orbit is around 250 million years (give or take). I say this to give some perspective on the time scale. Will need to do another story for this sometime, there is a lot of history I have come up with that isn't even mentioned or hinted at in here. Plus there are a lot of questions introduced and not answered.
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This is the full story that resulted from the 11/6/2008 Thursday Prompt. It got... um... LONG. One week to write and one to edit. About 24 pages long.
Right now I am very happy with it, although I expect in six months I will find all sorts of things I want to do differently. Was a nice break from Rohai.
Oh, and for reference 1 Galactic Orbit is around 250 million years (give or take). I say this to give some perspective on the time scale. Will need to do another story for this sometime, there is a lot of history I have come up with that isn't even mentioned or hinted at in here. Plus there are a lot of questions introduced and not answered.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dog (Other)
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 73.5 kB
I agree, it is very very good. Very few typos and only one tiny technical glitch. Acceleration constant is meters per second second. One of my hobbies is astronomy so yeah, got the full impact of the huge amount of time the ship was down instantly.
For my two cents the length is fine, even helps to keep the suspense flowing naturally in my opinion. I only got to this now because I’m so far behind. This will be the much longed for follow up to Rohai then, can’t wait.
For my two cents the length is fine, even helps to keep the suspense flowing naturally in my opinion. I only got to this now because I’m so far behind. This will be the much longed for follow up to Rohai then, can’t wait.
Yeah, that’s how my physics teacher always said it so it seems natural to write it that way too. One of the more fascinating aspects of astronomy is how stars move over time and most times it comes up the galactic rotation gets mentioned. Run across it enough times it eventually sticks, like any other little bit of trivia.
This was really entertaining. The story does bring up some questions, but it still stands well on its own. I kind of wanted to see more description of the characters and the ship, but that's because I found them very interesting. And other then a few typos(the kind of things a spell check won't pick up)I thought it was very well done.
Thanks.
Yeah, character description is one thing I needed to do more (I realized this shortly after posting). It is mentioned that Dana and her parents are both Border Collies and that the main character is some sort of mutt. Also the other two characters are implied to be canine (and they are) and mutts as well, though I really need to make that more explicit.
Yeah, character description is one thing I needed to do more (I realized this shortly after posting). It is mentioned that Dana and her parents are both Border Collies and that the main character is some sort of mutt. Also the other two characters are implied to be canine (and they are) and mutts as well, though I really need to make that more explicit.
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