~*~ Critique wanted! ~*~

:D Some really recent stuff... This is a very very first draft that I would really like some critique from the writers on here about.

Probably going to be completely overhauled at least twice before it's really ready to be called finished. XD

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Margins

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Little dead pine trees
lining the partition where the road cuts through,
the potential for TLC whirring by, preoccupied
by mobile phones and translucent, glowing aspirations.
Little dead pine trees stand
like abandoned amber alerts, waiting
to be forgotten about on the next news round
as the pick-six’s and the seasonal line-up
are hungrily attended to.