It's...hard to respond, really. The structure is interesting, though the interleaved italic and non-italic text (perhaps intentionally?) leaves a disjointed, confusing feel--and then seems to end abruptly.

I do like the existential dread you've invoked. Typically, resurrection is portrayed solely in positive terms--a "new lease on life." Having someone be primarily weirded out, or even upset (whether secretly or openly) about it and what it implies, is an interesting and curious direction, so I'd be curious to see where you took that.

Of course, this now makes the second potential on-going writing project you've got planned. Perhaps it's an effort to keep things fresh. I doubt you really need the "advice," but still, be careful about overloading yourself.

Thank you very much not just for commenting, but for giving this a chance, as I figured it would be pretty much incomprehensible if you haven't read any of the comics (and then, it's a relatively unknown comic, though that's changed a bit in recent years). These are only teasers, as well as try-out scenes; when I get to the first chapter proper, I'll try my best to make the whole thing comprehensible even with no prior knowledge of the story or the characters.

So, again, thanks for giving this a chance, and I'm very glad to see that at least some things did work in these circumstances.

About the structure: in the second part, the idea was that the italic text is thoughts and the non-italic is spoken dialogue. It's also one of those experiments I do sometimes in my fanfics as exercises for my other writings, to see if they work or not and in what contexts. Here, basically I wanted to use a bit of a narrative technique that Stephen King in particular is fond of, a character's random thoughts sometimes interrupting the narrative, to the point of splitting sentences.

It ends VERY abruptly, I agree, as these were just three separate scenes, but in retrospective I should have given all, especially the third one, a proper conclusion instead of simply letting them end.

Glad you liked the part about the resurrection, and then this second scene is the one I feel worked best (though it still needs work). It is one thing I particularly enjoy in fiction (both reading and writing), this playing with concepts. But not just for the sake of trying something new; rather, for the sake of challenging notions. In this case, if resurrections are par for the course in most (mainstream US) superhero comics or, say for example, in "Dragon Ball Z", would this really be as wonderful as we imagine? Wouldn't that make death trivial and therefore life itself?

So here, I wanted to show at least one of the characters struggling with this idea.

Thank you for the advice; and believe me, this is something I do try to keep in mind, pacing myself. I have definitely gotten to the point of exhaustion a few times and let's just say it's certainly no fun. Currently the way I'm doing this is: First, of course, work and, let's say more "serious" projects (this isn't the right word to use, but I think you know what you mean, the stuff that is not just for fun); then, when it comes to fan-fiction, the priority is my long-running fic, as it's the one I have been working on the longest, and it's one I really do want to bring all the way to the end. But every once in a while I need a break from that one, and that is when I retake this and other projects for later.

Currently, counting this one, there's a total of five projects, but the plan is that after the Morenatsu one is done, I pick the next one to work on until the end and so on. We'll see how things go...