Oh damn... That dragon must be beyond happy. At least he'll have a good rest that night.

And end up even fatter tomorrow. -_^

Oh my.

This one seems pretty rushed.
Intentional?

Not particularly! It is a relatively short story and it's just a slice of life, as opposed to having any real plot, though. That part was intentional. I wanted to just to a single day. What about this made it feel rushed?

The sentence structure.

On occasion you were using much more relaxed and casual narrative. At one point you even used "kinda": a piece of jargon I do not recall seeing in your pieces before.
Hrm.
Beyond that you glazed over certain details you frequently refer to. Precisely how much a person has changed, any particular food loves they obsess over, and of course the more grim side of things of what this sort of habit can do to a person.

Not that I'm complaining! I did enjoy this piece thoroughly. It's just notable when an author changes their style a bit!

That's really interesting! Thanks for the analysis. ^_^

You know, I did catch myself using some very casual phrases when I was writing. I think it was partially because the tone of this piece is really different. Normally, like you said, I like to focus on the mental aspects with a character, and how they've changed and adapted. This was really a different focus. I wanted to really just spend more time lingering on descriptions and the actual gluttony. Maybe that brought out a little bit of my old RPing ways, and it showed up in my writing.

It definitely did have a very RP feel to it, like you were the dragon and someone else was the buffet staff, rather than your normal view. Also had a far more positive vibe than the rest of your work, which don't get me wrong was refreshing, but felt almost out-of-place.

I personally really enjoyed that positive vibe, and this story in general.

If you like greedy and huge. You might like to hear about an RP I am doing with someone. If you can stand all the fetishes involved that is hun. >w<