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This is loosely inspired by a previous story I'd written, which I've since moved to scraps. It features two new characters who I hope to include in other stories later on. I'm also going to try and illustrate a few scenes from it.
A coyote tries to escape from the den of a giant wolf, meets new friends, and gets quite the shot of adrenaline in the meantime. And just to clarify "Yote" is the name of the race of anthropomorphic coyotes in this world.
All misspellings, bad grammar, plot holes and general corniness belong to me.
A coyote tries to escape from the den of a giant wolf, meets new friends, and gets quite the shot of adrenaline in the meantime. And just to clarify "Yote" is the name of the race of anthropomorphic coyotes in this world.
All misspellings, bad grammar, plot holes and general corniness belong to me.
Category Story / Macro / Micro
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File Size 35 kB
This was certainly a nice little story. It's always comforting to read a story where the underdog, or I guess under coyote in this case, manages to overcome a great obstacle such as this. Yeah, it's a bit corny at points, but then again don't we all need our vegetables once in a while?
All in all, I like this story, and am curious to see if you'll be continuing it.
All in all, I like this story, and am curious to see if you'll be continuing it.
Haha, I enjoy a bit of corniness myself. Thank you for the compliment, man. I always enjoy getting feedback on my stories.
I'm thinking about continuing it. I should definitely be using these characters again, the coyote especially. He'll start making appearances in other art and stories I do.
I'm thinking about continuing it. I should definitely be using these characters again, the coyote especially. He'll start making appearances in other art and stories I do.
Story was quite nice, a couple of things i picked up which i think may be adjusted a little.
In part of the story you refer to the coyote and wolf as Coyote-man and wolf-man, I think if you wrote him and the Giant it wouldnt change much but sound a little more relaxed on the form of them.
There is also a part during the chase where the wolf says your smell is delectable, to me it sounds like tasty than enticing. It still makes sense and it was nice to see the use of wording.
Ehhh, whats going on? and so ehhh, much pain sounds a little bad, my advice would be to put "Oh god, whats going on?" and "It hurts" he whimpered.
Us dragons lick wounds immediately, without really thinking. Its just instinct.” should be we as if talking about all dragons or a select few Us would be appropriate.
In part of the story you refer to the coyote and wolf as Coyote-man and wolf-man, I think if you wrote him and the Giant it wouldnt change much but sound a little more relaxed on the form of them.
There is also a part during the chase where the wolf says your smell is delectable, to me it sounds like tasty than enticing. It still makes sense and it was nice to see the use of wording.
Ehhh, whats going on? and so ehhh, much pain sounds a little bad, my advice would be to put "Oh god, whats going on?" and "It hurts" he whimpered.
Us dragons lick wounds immediately, without really thinking. Its just instinct.” should be we as if talking about all dragons or a select few Us would be appropriate.
Hey thanks for the critique. I really appreciate it.
In the part where he is referring to the coyote smelling delectable that is what I meant it to mean. That was a tough part though, because I actually rewrote that entire scene, but I wanted to keep that line. I tried to blend it, but it didn't come out perfect.
In the part where he is referring to the coyote smelling delectable that is what I meant it to mean. That was a tough part though, because I actually rewrote that entire scene, but I wanted to keep that line. I tried to blend it, but it didn't come out perfect.
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