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Ok, this is part 8, and Davos has presented the idea of an alliance between him and Zok. Count Arctus Arconium is more of a villan now, because of his nasty little habit. (More on this will coem in the next few updates.) Maria and Bodvar are gonna have a little romatic blood-sucking scene again in the next update. (I can't wait to write that, and no, nothing involving XXX scenes.)
Also, parts 6 and 7 are included, with some spelling corrections. (I hope i got them all Kuntos, I'm sure you will tell me if i don't.)
Also, parts 6 and 7 are included, with some spelling corrections. (I hope i got them all Kuntos, I'm sure you will tell me if i don't.)
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Intriguing! Very intriguing! You've got me on the edge of my seat!
Well, I see Kuntos hasn't gotten to any potential spelling errors yet. I only saw two. You said "You weren't even their Zok," when you should have said "You weren't even there Zok." Another was ... I don't remember the sentence, but you said new when you meant knew. But my assumption is you pressed on the k key too quickly and it didn't respond. The same thing happens to me all ... the ... time!
One more thing, you keep saying "turned" when you refer to one becoming a vampire. That would be proper terminology for a werewolf. For a vampire, the word is "sired."
Keep it coming! Need material for your characters' guest appearances in my script.
By the by, I'm currently working on the dinner scene, I'll post it as soon as I finish.
Wow! This comment was long!
Well, I see Kuntos hasn't gotten to any potential spelling errors yet. I only saw two. You said "You weren't even their Zok," when you should have said "You weren't even there Zok." Another was ... I don't remember the sentence, but you said new when you meant knew. But my assumption is you pressed on the k key too quickly and it didn't respond. The same thing happens to me all ... the ... time!
One more thing, you keep saying "turned" when you refer to one becoming a vampire. That would be proper terminology for a werewolf. For a vampire, the word is "sired."
Keep it coming! Need material for your characters' guest appearances in my script.
By the by, I'm currently working on the dinner scene, I'll post it as soon as I finish.
Wow! This comment was long!
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