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So... It's been about two years since I wrote the short story: Afterlife - Shame, and well... This was in the back burner for a very long time since. I started working on it here and there, but I felt every time I started, I got bored of doing it. I can't really explain it, but nothing was really scrapped.
Anyway, this is a Clean series (so no sexual stuff, sorry) that I started to really explore what it means to be Humane. The first issue: Shame, is only about 30 pages, and this one almost doubles that. It's rather short for such an idea, but a lot of that is due to my lack of interest in doing it. However, a little bit of inspiration did catch me after Decayer, and I felt like this story really Deserved a sequel.
Though, I do tend to have a-LOT of personal issues with this one. Which is probably why I wasn't really fond of the final result. Regardless, I won't state anything but a slight warning: It's very... Soapbox-y. As in, there's a lot of personal opinions that I'm getting off my chest and using this story as a stage. Be warned: if you're new to my stories, I am very cynical.
Regardless, enjoy this medium sized story as a small break from dragon stories. Because right now, I miss writing them =X But which I will work on next, I'm not sure yet. As for Afterlife's future, I'm not sure when I'll getting around to part 3, the (most likely) final part to the series. Anyway, enough rambling. Enjoy Digital Shadow.
Afterlife © Amaranthe
Digital Shadow © Miracle Of Sound
Charr species © Arena.net
Anyway, this is a Clean series (so no sexual stuff, sorry) that I started to really explore what it means to be Humane. The first issue: Shame, is only about 30 pages, and this one almost doubles that. It's rather short for such an idea, but a lot of that is due to my lack of interest in doing it. However, a little bit of inspiration did catch me after Decayer, and I felt like this story really Deserved a sequel.
Though, I do tend to have a-LOT of personal issues with this one. Which is probably why I wasn't really fond of the final result. Regardless, I won't state anything but a slight warning: It's very... Soapbox-y. As in, there's a lot of personal opinions that I'm getting off my chest and using this story as a stage. Be warned: if you're new to my stories, I am very cynical.
Regardless, enjoy this medium sized story as a small break from dragon stories. Because right now, I miss writing them =X But which I will work on next, I'm not sure yet. As for Afterlife's future, I'm not sure when I'll getting around to part 3, the (most likely) final part to the series. Anyway, enough rambling. Enjoy Digital Shadow.
Afterlife © Amaranthe
Digital Shadow © Miracle Of Sound
Charr species © Arena.net
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Cow
Size 120 x 80px
File Size 317.1 kB
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Hey Bartan,
After a long period of silence (.. can't really believe its been 4 months since my last comment) I got finally around reading and commenting to your story.
The fighting scenes were really intense and well written. And what a way to introduce a new villain and new ally! It keeps getting more and more interesting. The real meaning of the shadows would be a subject to further explore as it seems to come in many forms and uncertainties (shadows merging and giving new 'powers' or maybe are far more corrupting).
The charr is still mysterious, thus a very interesting character! I am curious to his back story, but I am prepared it would not really fit into this story but maybe an possible idea for another.
Additionally the poethic fragments introduced into the story really reflects to what is wrong in our society and the society of the story. However fighting it is always difficult as it is always easier to look away, as would I.
Even if you say that your not really happy at the final result, I can see a bit why. The story flow feels maybe a bit 'soapboxy' as you called it, but still I think it is not a bad way to tell the story and get its point across. And still it did not really prevent my enjoyment of the development of the story. I would really consider it as a very minor anoyance, which I self did not really consider. :-P You are too hard on yourself sometimes!
A great story! Good luck with your future writings! And will hopefully commenting soon again!
Take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
After a long period of silence (.. can't really believe its been 4 months since my last comment) I got finally around reading and commenting to your story.
The fighting scenes were really intense and well written. And what a way to introduce a new villain and new ally! It keeps getting more and more interesting. The real meaning of the shadows would be a subject to further explore as it seems to come in many forms and uncertainties (shadows merging and giving new 'powers' or maybe are far more corrupting).
The charr is still mysterious, thus a very interesting character! I am curious to his back story, but I am prepared it would not really fit into this story but maybe an possible idea for another.
Additionally the poethic fragments introduced into the story really reflects to what is wrong in our society and the society of the story. However fighting it is always difficult as it is always easier to look away, as would I.
Even if you say that your not really happy at the final result, I can see a bit why. The story flow feels maybe a bit 'soapboxy' as you called it, but still I think it is not a bad way to tell the story and get its point across. And still it did not really prevent my enjoyment of the development of the story. I would really consider it as a very minor anoyance, which I self did not really consider. :-P You are too hard on yourself sometimes!
A great story! Good luck with your future writings! And will hopefully commenting soon again!
Take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Hello Silent!
It's great to hear from you again, and so quickly at that! I hope you didn't burn through this story that fast =P Hard to believe it's been four months since your last comment. I knew it was a while, but it honestly doesn't feel like it has been four. More like two, maybe two and a half. I guess the summer is going quickly!
I'm glad you enjoyed, and were able to follow the fight scenes in this Act. I was honestly worried by the end of writing them that they might be overwhelming for the reader. It's much easier to describe the way a more feral creature and how it moves, like in my previous stories (for the most part). But Eman... He often moves parts of his body alot, yet some of it very little in order to save energy. It was difficult to find that balance between describing too much, and not enough, mostly due to how important his movements were. I only hope I did it some justice
Yes, Eman is definitely on the Mysterious, and Self-Righteous side. And personally, I feel like he stole the show. There's just too much story behind him that it honestly calls for his own spin-off. Though Afterlife is still revolving around the threats of these shadow creatures, Gorret and Leslie (and I guess Gene) all seemed to take this backseat after the Charr was introduced. "But then again, how else would he gain their trust?" Is what I kept thinking when I was editing it. Hmm, maybe it's just in my head.
"However fighting it is always difficult as it is always easier to look away, as would I."
I really hate to 'spoil' this, but I'm glad you said that. It's actually a rather important theme in the next act revolving around the citizens of the city. I won't say any more of it, but I just had to say that
I'm really glad the 'Soapboxyness' did seem to ruin it. Though alot of it did come from Eman himself (another reason why he half fit the role of the Outsider), he was the perfect character to do this with. Not to mention, one to attempt to get things done, not just talk about them. If he cannot convince them of change, he would often attempt to do it himself.
Deago and the others often say I'm too hard on myself as well, something that will probably come up in the yearly Decemeber story. So I won't say too much about it, but I half wonder if it leads to the idea of getting one's name out there, and perhaps getting the attention of others. Something I often question, because I already have the perfect reader
Much Silent. I hope you're enjoying Death March, it's quite different from my other dragon stories
~Bartan
It's great to hear from you again, and so quickly at that! I hope you didn't burn through this story that fast =P Hard to believe it's been four months since your last comment. I knew it was a while, but it honestly doesn't feel like it has been four. More like two, maybe two and a half. I guess the summer is going quickly!
I'm glad you enjoyed, and were able to follow the fight scenes in this Act. I was honestly worried by the end of writing them that they might be overwhelming for the reader. It's much easier to describe the way a more feral creature and how it moves, like in my previous stories (for the most part). But Eman... He often moves parts of his body alot, yet some of it very little in order to save energy. It was difficult to find that balance between describing too much, and not enough, mostly due to how important his movements were. I only hope I did it some justice
Yes, Eman is definitely on the Mysterious, and Self-Righteous side. And personally, I feel like he stole the show. There's just too much story behind him that it honestly calls for his own spin-off. Though Afterlife is still revolving around the threats of these shadow creatures, Gorret and Leslie (and I guess Gene) all seemed to take this backseat after the Charr was introduced. "But then again, how else would he gain their trust?" Is what I kept thinking when I was editing it. Hmm, maybe it's just in my head.
"However fighting it is always difficult as it is always easier to look away, as would I."
I really hate to 'spoil' this, but I'm glad you said that. It's actually a rather important theme in the next act revolving around the citizens of the city. I won't say any more of it, but I just had to say that
I'm really glad the 'Soapboxyness' did seem to ruin it. Though alot of it did come from Eman himself (another reason why he half fit the role of the Outsider), he was the perfect character to do this with. Not to mention, one to attempt to get things done, not just talk about them. If he cannot convince them of change, he would often attempt to do it himself.
Deago and the others often say I'm too hard on myself as well, something that will probably come up in the yearly Decemeber story. So I won't say too much about it, but I half wonder if it leads to the idea of getting one's name out there, and perhaps getting the attention of others. Something I often question, because I already have the perfect reader
Much Silent. I hope you're enjoying Death March, it's quite different from my other dragon stories
~Bartan
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