I had to reread the series to grasp what was happening. It's been a while since Jarr's adventure had been updated. There is a noticeable difference of quality as I reread through it. It's good and I do hope this continues (as well as all your other works too). My only complaint is the story is still too broken to read altogether (I know they are drafts, and works in progress), though they do well enough when taken in separately. Hopefully they get a rewrite, or maybe simply fleshed out between "pages."

Yeah, Jarr's one of the stories that I work on very sparingly.

I hope the difference was for the better :)

and Yes, I know the parts in this series are pretty broken up, primarily because all I really have of it are broken up scenes without really any interconnected stories. I've been trying to add detailes between the parts, but nothing's really been working at this point.

once(if) the story reaches it's conclusion I'll probably see about fleshing it out

Wow. I hadn't realized there was another story in progress... I did find it odd that it was labeled Page 14. lol.

Well, time to catch up on this one. :)

I hope you enjoy them

I enjoyed it, and I only remember THIS part so far. :)