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March... Ugh, March is my freaking bane.
This one is surprisingly short for the time it took. At the moment, there's a storm overhead of freezing rain, so I'm trying to make this rather quick in case we lose power. So basics: No Sex Scenes in this one (But look forward to act 2), both songs used are quite harsh, and this is a "brand new" story. Otherwords, you don't need to know/read any of my previous ones to enjoy this one. But be warned: It's kinda harsh.
That being said, there is one character that has been in a couple of my previous ones: Beo. But do not expect him to act the same. This was a... Different Time. And it will make sense later on. Even though this story doesn't really Focus on Beo'Karah, this is where he started.
Without further delay, I present you the story of Beo.
The story of my Husband.
Fear Is The Weakness © In Flames (harsh vocals)
Death March © Motionless In White (semi harsh vocals)
This one is surprisingly short for the time it took. At the moment, there's a storm overhead of freezing rain, so I'm trying to make this rather quick in case we lose power. So basics: No Sex Scenes in this one (But look forward to act 2), both songs used are quite harsh, and this is a "brand new" story. Otherwords, you don't need to know/read any of my previous ones to enjoy this one. But be warned: It's kinda harsh.
That being said, there is one character that has been in a couple of my previous ones: Beo. But do not expect him to act the same. This was a... Different Time. And it will make sense later on. Even though this story doesn't really Focus on Beo'Karah, this is where he started.
Without further delay, I present you the story of Beo.
The story of my Husband.
Fear Is The Weakness © In Flames (harsh vocals)
Death March © Motionless In White (semi harsh vocals)
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Western Dragon
Size 120 x 80px
File Size 259.4 kB
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Hey Bartan,
Great story again, it was indeed a bit different. Maybe a bit darker, but still enjoyable to read and I liked how you began with the uncovered letter. I liked the way how you gave each dragon a bit of backstory and how their general views were represented. And I am feeling bad for Raccel he has to deal with quite some resistance of them even when he tries his best for all. Luckily the later battle scene gave a better indication that they did gave about him in some way.
It is also quite unfortunate how all they wanted the power of Death while they do not really seem to realize what kind of effect it could have on themselves. Or maybe they do, their behaviour does not always seem to reflect that, in contrast to Raccel's. And to make things worse the state of the universe is also not really at it bests's state. I am quite curious how everything will turn out, but at least I think I already know where the ending scene is heading!
I will not be able to comment in the next week as I will be taking a vacation at another vacation, leaving tomorrow. So will be silent for a short period again at the longest :P. So will very probably also not see your reply then on time.
Will also have to listen to the music, but will try to have done that before the next time I comment.
Good luck with everything and take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Great story again, it was indeed a bit different. Maybe a bit darker, but still enjoyable to read and I liked how you began with the uncovered letter. I liked the way how you gave each dragon a bit of backstory and how their general views were represented. And I am feeling bad for Raccel he has to deal with quite some resistance of them even when he tries his best for all. Luckily the later battle scene gave a better indication that they did gave about him in some way.
It is also quite unfortunate how all they wanted the power of Death while they do not really seem to realize what kind of effect it could have on themselves. Or maybe they do, their behaviour does not always seem to reflect that, in contrast to Raccel's. And to make things worse the state of the universe is also not really at it bests's state. I am quite curious how everything will turn out, but at least I think I already know where the ending scene is heading!
I will not be able to comment in the next week as I will be taking a vacation at another vacation, leaving tomorrow. So will be silent for a short period again at the longest :P. So will very probably also not see your reply then on time.
Will also have to listen to the music, but will try to have done that before the next time I comment.
Good luck with everything and take care!
- Silent Moonlight Dragon
Hello again, Silent!
You went through this one rather quickly too, and it means alot that you've been enjoying these stories! I know it's been said a hundred times already, but I really do appreciate everything, especially the depth of your comments. It really does tell what I'm doing correct, especially when I'm trying something new or different.
Speaking of different, Death March specifically does seem rather bleak. But the second act will get lighter. This storyline tends to flow up and down like this quite a bit. Anyway, I really wanted to set a complete separate tone, one of almost Desperation for these characters. I know this act tended to have a lot of information bouncing around, I'm still wondering if there was anything not really explained (Besides Beo's actual backstory, that's in Act 2). And as much as I would like to keep one thing simple: Beo being the starting main character, There wasn't really a way to do it. That's one thing you'll notice in Down With The Fallen: the main character drastically switches. Granted, that was foreshadowed at the very end of Death March, as you seen Fun times are ahead.
Enjoy your second vacation, Silent! Have some fun while the summer lasts!
~Bartan
You went through this one rather quickly too, and it means alot that you've been enjoying these stories! I know it's been said a hundred times already, but I really do appreciate everything, especially the depth of your comments. It really does tell what I'm doing correct, especially when I'm trying something new or different.
Speaking of different, Death March specifically does seem rather bleak. But the second act will get lighter. This storyline tends to flow up and down like this quite a bit. Anyway, I really wanted to set a complete separate tone, one of almost Desperation for these characters. I know this act tended to have a lot of information bouncing around, I'm still wondering if there was anything not really explained (Besides Beo's actual backstory, that's in Act 2). And as much as I would like to keep one thing simple: Beo being the starting main character, There wasn't really a way to do it. That's one thing you'll notice in Down With The Fallen: the main character drastically switches. Granted, that was foreshadowed at the very end of Death March, as you seen Fun times are ahead.
Enjoy your second vacation, Silent! Have some fun while the summer lasts!
~Bartan
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