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Well, it's been quite some time since I submitted anything. College is hard stuff! >.<
Anyhoo, this particular piece was written for
furrywriter. ^^
Why....cuz he's a fellow furry writer SILLY!!! x3
*pokes tonuge* (^______^)
Seriously though, I was introduced to Furrywrtier via
kogie.
His name, plus the fact that he dabbled in literature, must have sparked something in me, as so many things do! \(^o^)/
Well, I have some metaphors in this one. Some may be a bit strange, so here's my little list:
1.) pauper's-pot = (take a guess) ^-^
2.) tiny pillar's flame = (candle)
3.) writer's-well = (same as #1)
4.) wooden-tick = (clock)
5.) liquid coal = (take a guess) ^-^
6.) pinion-pen = (quill)
7.) dusky fluid's = (same as #5)
Hopefully, once you finish reading it, you'll know JUST what this poem is all about, as well as who the speaker is! This may not have my usual mind blowing imagery, but the overall concept is pretty interesting! =D
Well, I hope you all enjoy this one. I doubt I'll have another one coming anytime soon with college studies and all! =D
*gives Furrywriter a hug* \(^o^)/
Anyhoo, this particular piece was written for
furrywriter. ^^Why....cuz he's a fellow furry writer SILLY!!! x3
*pokes tonuge* (^______^)
Seriously though, I was introduced to Furrywrtier via
kogie.His name, plus the fact that he dabbled in literature, must have sparked something in me, as so many things do! \(^o^)/
Well, I have some metaphors in this one. Some may be a bit strange, so here's my little list:
1.) pauper's-pot = (take a guess) ^-^
2.) tiny pillar's flame = (candle)
3.) writer's-well = (same as #1)
4.) wooden-tick = (clock)
5.) liquid coal = (take a guess) ^-^
6.) pinion-pen = (quill)
7.) dusky fluid's = (same as #5)
Hopefully, once you finish reading it, you'll know JUST what this poem is all about, as well as who the speaker is! This may not have my usual mind blowing imagery, but the overall concept is pretty interesting! =D
Well, I hope you all enjoy this one. I doubt I'll have another one coming anytime soon with college studies and all! =D
*gives Furrywriter a hug* \(^o^)/
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I like this poem a lot. However this:
"My boundaries aren't natural,
no banks of earth to keep me in.
I bend to bordered alphabets
set forth by master's pinion-pen."
Is freaking genius. As a comment on orthography, language, and fiction all in one.
"of Peter Piper's pepper flute."
This is a natural invention of the stanza, but if you wanted it to be read without any inkling (no pun intended) of the obscene, you'll have to rewrite it.
"acknowledge he who wields the quill."
This is a very strong end. Although it sounds vaguely archaic, using the pronoun for emphasis is vaguely archaic in the first place, and I think you want "Acknowledge Him Who Weilds the Quill." Although I'm not dead for sure.
"My boundaries aren't natural,
no banks of earth to keep me in.
I bend to bordered alphabets
set forth by master's pinion-pen."
Is freaking genius. As a comment on orthography, language, and fiction all in one.
"of Peter Piper's pepper flute."
This is a natural invention of the stanza, but if you wanted it to be read without any inkling (no pun intended) of the obscene, you'll have to rewrite it.
"acknowledge he who wields the quill."
This is a very strong end. Although it sounds vaguely archaic, using the pronoun for emphasis is vaguely archaic in the first place, and I think you want "Acknowledge Him Who Weilds the Quill." Although I'm not dead for sure.
Oh wowsa!! \(^o^)/
Thank you very much! ^^
I really liked the way stanza 5 came out. It's definitely one of my faves.
I'm glad you liked the ending as well. As for "he" vs. "him," I did indeed mean "he." Though, now that I think about it, "him" would work too. I just like the way "he" sounds. =3
Oh, and I appreciate the fave. (^__^)
Thank you very much! ^^
I really liked the way stanza 5 came out. It's definitely one of my faves.
I'm glad you liked the ending as well. As for "he" vs. "him," I did indeed mean "he." Though, now that I think about it, "him" would work too. I just like the way "he" sounds. =3
Oh, and I appreciate the fave. (^__^)
"This is a very strong end. Although it sounds vaguely archaic, using the pronoun for emphasis is vaguely archaic in the first place, and I think you want "Acknowledge Him Who Weilds the Quill." Although I'm not dead for sure."
Hehe, I know this is old, but you are INDEED correct sir! I was talking to
Maxgoof about the whole he/him thingy regarding one of my latest poems, and it should indeed be "HIM." :>
Of course, your comments are GREATLY appreciated! ;3
Hehe, I know this is old, but you are INDEED correct sir! I was talking to
Maxgoof about the whole he/him thingy regarding one of my latest poems, and it should indeed be "HIM." :>Of course, your comments are GREATLY appreciated! ;3
Not only was it the greatest of intentions as far as poetic messages are concerned, but it flowed extraordinarily well. I would love to master meter like this. Perhaps, you could teach? You managed to impress one of the most strict poets on this site (Furthling). ^.^ I still haven't quite accomplished that.
Hehe, well thank you very much! =P
Though, I'm not looking at this from a contest point-of-view. I write for my own personal pleasure, but it makes me smile to receive such comments! \(^o^)/
As for the flow, I do indeed owe that to the wonderful (meter). In all honesty, I wasn't too good at it myself, until I hooked up with Maxgoof. He's a wonderful teacher! He'll deny his AWEsomeness, but just ignore that. I would also suggest having (dictionary.com) up while you're writing with meter, as the thesaurus is most certainly your BEST friend in the syllabic world! x3
But hey, I'd love to help. Do you instant message? I have all 3, but I hardly EVER use AIM. My poetry buddies are mostly on MSN, and I also use YIM. You can catch me on either one frequently. (MSN more than YIM though) =D
Thanks again! ;D
Though, I'm not looking at this from a contest point-of-view. I write for my own personal pleasure, but it makes me smile to receive such comments! \(^o^)/
As for the flow, I do indeed owe that to the wonderful (meter). In all honesty, I wasn't too good at it myself, until I hooked up with
Maxgoof. He's a wonderful teacher! He'll deny his AWEsomeness, but just ignore that. I would also suggest having (dictionary.com) up while you're writing with meter, as the thesaurus is most certainly your BEST friend in the syllabic world! x3But hey, I'd love to help. Do you instant message? I have all 3, but I hardly EVER use AIM. My poetry buddies are mostly on MSN, and I also use YIM. You can catch me on either one frequently. (MSN more than YIM though) =D
Thanks again! ;D
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