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Long ago, magi were despised creatures. They were hunted down for their dangerous sorceries, driven to the ends of the earth. Most infused themselves with the last of their magic to become enormous beings of power equally immense, becoming the giants of today. However, undocumented was a second sect of magi who instead utilized their spellcraft to hide away, keeping safe from the rest of the world and all its strife. Some say that this sect is far from dissipated; indeed, that its scions still linger among us, hiding in plain sight.
Lucibelle receives her gift as a curse; the history of her progenitors has long faded to mystery. Little does she know that what she finds a mere annoyance may just shape a friendship.
So it's been a while since I wrote a full story about Tali. While I started brainstorming some ideas to get myself started, I got a little bit distracted in coming up with a character to complement her. In the end, she kind of took the lead role, and... well, a sheep in the hand is worth two in the carpet. No new direction is a crime, right?
Googledoc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....it?usp=sharing
Begin your quest into sheepdom, and enjoy!
Lucibelle receives her gift as a curse; the history of her progenitors has long faded to mystery. Little does she know that what she finds a mere annoyance may just shape a friendship.
So it's been a while since I wrote a full story about Tali. While I started brainstorming some ideas to get myself started, I got a little bit distracted in coming up with a character to complement her. In the end, she kind of took the lead role, and... well, a sheep in the hand is worth two in the carpet. No new direction is a crime, right?
Googledoc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/.....it?usp=sharing
Begin your quest into sheepdom, and enjoy!
Category Story / Macro / Micro
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 78px
File Size 25.8 kB
Ah, that's great to hear! The imagery was something I wanted to nail to the floor, especially given the sheer scale of poor Lucibelle compared to her gal pal. She was a ton of fun to write; bleats under breath like a verbal tick and jingling sashays of her tail all throughout, Thank you for reading, and glad you enjoyed!
Really, really enjoyed this.
Lucibelle is cute and fragile and she has your sympathies pretty quickly. Her psyching herself up in her kitchen alone was extremely good, since you both get where her attitude is at and what the actual danger is.
Tons of fun wordplay, I really like how you write:
"a cramped bedroom and ever crampier latrine."
"Her thoughts merged into a dust devil of deliberation."
"fell to her wooly bottom"
Probably my favorite bit was this moment that shows off how small she is, when something as tiny as a phone buzzing with a notification is apocalyptic:
"The sky exploded into vibrating shockwaves. The very air molecules seemed to erupt many miles above her head—Lucibelle stepped back in recoil, but not start, focusing her mind on the calming ringing of her replica carillon that accompanied her movements. The sheep managed a glance to her screen again: 'Sent.'"
A few things were a little confusing: I never could really picture what the magician looked like, maybe a few more details when she's first introduced. I also never really understood the hum of magic she sees sometimes, like on her phone near the beginning, and since it never came back up it fall off my brain pretty quickly.
Hope to see Lucibelle again! This story's like 9 years old so... maybe there's a chance we saw her again!
Good stuff good stuff
Lucibelle is cute and fragile and she has your sympathies pretty quickly. Her psyching herself up in her kitchen alone was extremely good, since you both get where her attitude is at and what the actual danger is.
Tons of fun wordplay, I really like how you write:
"a cramped bedroom and ever crampier latrine."
"Her thoughts merged into a dust devil of deliberation."
"fell to her wooly bottom"
Probably my favorite bit was this moment that shows off how small she is, when something as tiny as a phone buzzing with a notification is apocalyptic:
"The sky exploded into vibrating shockwaves. The very air molecules seemed to erupt many miles above her head—Lucibelle stepped back in recoil, but not start, focusing her mind on the calming ringing of her replica carillon that accompanied her movements. The sheep managed a glance to her screen again: 'Sent.'"
A few things were a little confusing: I never could really picture what the magician looked like, maybe a few more details when she's first introduced. I also never really understood the hum of magic she sees sometimes, like on her phone near the beginning, and since it never came back up it fall off my brain pretty quickly.
Hope to see Lucibelle again! This story's like 9 years old so... maybe there's a chance we saw her again!
Good stuff good stuff
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