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Not the final title. Something I started a while back when I was lacking internet. It might feel a little harry potter-ish to some folks, not quite what I intended and I'll probably fix some of the terms. The main characters are young but they're not teeny boppers, they're around 17-18.
Anyway I just felt like toying around with the concept. Something a lot of us could relate to, either bding alone or confused and emberassed. ahh growing up, the horror ;)
And again, just a work in progress. I'll come back to it eventually, though not sure if I'd like to keep it clean or turn it dirty, i've thought of both.
Anyway I just felt like toying around with the concept. Something a lot of us could relate to, either bding alone or confused and emberassed. ahh growing up, the horror ;)
And again, just a work in progress. I'll come back to it eventually, though not sure if I'd like to keep it clean or turn it dirty, i've thought of both.
Category Story / All
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File Size 38 kB
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Wow that was very nice, it had a slow start but keep a nice even jog to a list of posibilities. You only need to work on your hook more, the ending needs a reason to really NEED more, ...like right now effect.
Course then that would make you need to do something simple, (in the resolution of the aformentioned hook) to keep from having to take the speed of the story to a sprint. Then you'd have to figure out a plausible way to go back to the jog.
So in this case i guess you're fine.
Course then that would make you need to do something simple, (in the resolution of the aformentioned hook) to keep from having to take the speed of the story to a sprint. Then you'd have to figure out a plausible way to go back to the jog.
So in this case i guess you're fine.
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