This is a fun story, with a lot of potential in the character's contrasts and contradictoary bonds. Love that sort of flirty, arch, sarcastic personality you give Oidhche. It's very fun to write, and of course as writers we have the advantage of polishing up our wit and bon mots. Much harder on the fly! And it contrasts nicely with Absinthe's more short-tempered, earthy persona. Kickass unicorn!

My main crits would be to speed up the action a bit in the beginning - maybe have her arriving home immediately, and fill in some of the backstory with inner monolog. I'd also like to see a little more description of the surroundings, and other bar patrons, which I know you do very well, to ground it firmly in the fantasy steampunk setting as distinct from the usual generic furry. It's a setting I quite love and there just isn't enough of it.

Keep up the good work, and sorry it took so long for me to get to!

No worries my good man, thank you for the compliments and crit, I'll try to apply it to my future writings.

And no worries, I don't mind, at least I'm getting some input at all! If you have spare time and would like to, I would like to hear what you think of my Fertilizer short story I wrote recently as well!