This was... great.
Until the unexplained powers.
Good writing style, fine quality.
Try to give more prompt for the cause and effect.

*happy sigh* How many times have I had a dream where something similar has happened? It seems so real, and I convince myself that it's "not like the other dreams because of x and y", and I get all excited about what's happening. Then I wake up.

A fun story, that leaves me with a slight sense of loss and longing. Gash dernit... I wish I could...

Technical comments:

Your paragraph where you explained the history behind the Disney jackets was a bit confusing because of the use of tense. The story itself is written in past tense, and that paragraph goes over something that had happened even further in the past. I understood what you meant, but I think it would have been clearer had you used 'had' more consistently. You did use it is some sentences, but not in others, and it led to a bit of confusion where I had to read it again to make sure I understood.

I realize it was a dream, and weird things happen in dreams. However, the revelation that he could indeed fly and his wife's apparent sudden loss of the fear of falling were pretty abrupt. Alanna seemed to accept (indeed, even discover) his newfound powers without a hitch nor hint of surprise. On the other hand, being a dream, perhaps that was the intent of the story--to set up his wife as more of an enabler to help him get over his own inhibition.

Just my two cents.

Yep - that's exactly what it was. I probably could have made it clearer, but yes, Alanna's odd acceptance and lack of fear or even surprise was because it was a dream. Kan was too immersed in flying around to notice. That's why I didn't feel any real need for a cause and effect explanation, we've all had dreams where things happen for no apparent reason.

Mostly though, it's because I've had this dream, and it happened... well, not exactly as I wrote it here, but close enough. One minute everything's normal, the next you can fly. It makes no sense, but it sure is fun.

I liked it...But I find it funny that the character name I used for my prompt was also Alanna >.< How strange...

Yeah that was a funny coincidence. You really don't see that name used very often.

Aww, this sure was a very good story! I know the feeling of such vivid, all-too-real dreams, where the most unexpected and weird and impossible things happen, in such a way that you don't even notice they're weird or impossible because it just feels natural at the moment... until you wake up and realize it was a dream. I have dreams like that so many times... =~.^=

Yeah, me too. I was trying to capture that, but I think I could have done it in a way that made a little more sense.

Rather funny. I liked this. Nice dream sequence. I was a bit confused, because they both take it so lightly, but the revelation in the end was good. Should have seen it coming. Nice little piece, I enjoyed reading this. Good work.

Yeah. I write these completely off the cuff, no editing, straight from my brain to your eyes. I go see what the prompt is, then I start writing, just like that. With almost every one of them, I see problems almost as soon as I post them but... this is a writing exercise so I don't stress too much about the mistakes, i just try to learn from them.

Looking back on this one though, I can see where I should have gone back and improved it. I think I should have either established it as a dream first, so that the oddness wouldn't seem so odd, or I should have made the dream flow more realistically so it wouldn't have looked strange in the context of a real situation.

I think writing something as a dream without establishing it first doesn't really work, it's too disjointed and stuff just happens with no explanation. Well, live and learn, right?

*chuckles... loved it... I have had those dreams. I have also had the dreams where you re falling... and the old wives' tale says that if you hit bottom you will die... poo... I had one dream where I ht bottom quite a few times, only to go back up the cliff and get pushed off again. But flying... that's a marvelous feeling...

V.

The flying dreams are my favorite. The feeling is just amazing.

Yeah, I wish I could have the flying dreams more often.