I can't read it because I'm on a phone and can't download things...

I'm sorry about that. I never figures out how to make it appear on the page aside from just copying it into the description area, unless that's what you're supposed to do.

If you want, I can email you a copy.

Argh, stupid phone posted my comment down there... *points* Sorry.

If saved in .txt format, it will display on the page. There's a specific type of encoding you should use to fix possible error symbols that might be generated, but I can't find the information I had regarding what it was.

How dramatic. The use of such a common event.
Straight A!

Thanks!

Very well written. Really... powerless... So much hatred and confusion and angst and powerlessness... This touched something in me. Not in a bad way, as such, but it was able to reach something old and very painful inside me. I have to admit that tears came to my eyes while I read this. Domestic violence is something that should never happen. Kids will always suffer because of it, even if they don't become directly attacked. Nice touch with the tiger in the end, I liked it.

Very good little piece.

Thanks. In my opinion getting a physical reaction is probably the best sign of doing something right, so glad to see I managed to do it!

ditto here in every word Panzer wrote.... just dittos....

*sighs...

V.

No, no, it's cool. I wasn't bitching at you or anything. *sweat* But as for the getting it to show up thing, if you have wordpad (or notepad, I've heard), save it as, umm... I -think- it's something like 'MS-DOS' format, I have to check. Yeah, MS-DOS format. Then, after you save it, type out your story (otherwise you'll have problems with your elipses) and save it again. Then, upload and edit/re-upload if necessary. I've -heard- you can do the same thing with Word and notepad, but I'm not sure.

But yeah, some people copy it into the description area. Might be easier. :-P

Alright, I'll try that next time. Thanks!

You're welcome. ^^ And sorry if I came off as sounding like a bitch the other day... having your wisdom teeth pulled is NOT fun. lol. If it doesn't work, lemme know and I'll figure it out by hand for ya.

Alright, will do. Thanks!

Welcome.

Coming from a family like this, I feel for it...It brought tears to my eyes....

Oh, and I was reading that you didn't know how to get it to show up underneath, all you have to change is having it as a .txt instead of a .doc There should be a selection for this, but if there isn't you can just change it by typing it in.

I'm sorry to hear about that. I hope the ending gave you a little bit of hope though; I couldn't end it on a bad note...

Thanks for the tip!

It did...It made me realize that eventually happy endings happen ^^

Your welcome. If you have trouble with it, just PM me and I help you as much I can...

Haha good to know. Glad to see you enjoyed it!

Not bad. It thought the transition from happiness to anger/fear was a bit quick so I was confused a bit, but that is how it happens I imagine!

Good job, and a cute ending.

Thanks, glad to see you enjoyed it!

Vivid at the start, vivid at the end, kind of goes off track in the middle - it sort of felt like it was leaning a little heavily on cliche, kept things a little too dry and at a distance given the conflicting feelings that're whirling around and expressed.

If you ever felt like rewriting it, redoing the scene in the middle to be milder - but hinting obliquely at bad things - imght work out a little better. Keep things balanced, y'know?

Yeah, I can see where you're coming from with that. I definitely got a little excited when I came up with the idea and tried to get it out right away. Redoing it at a later point might not be a bad idea.

Forgot to add: Thanks for the critique!