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E.C. I - The Chaos Within Stormwinds, Prologue - Part II
by Altarya
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10 years ago
Hello again,
Here it as as promised, part II of the prologue, as i had warned in the last post it would be released on Sunday, and all subsequent parts will be released on Sunday every 2 weeks.
Hope you enjoy part II, the narrator character in this one was actually controlled by a player during the tabletop RPG of stormwinds last year unlike Anne was controlled by me, the Dungeon Master or Game Master as they usually called me.
Also narrated by a stormian(you know, the feline race in this steampunk universe), unlike part 1.
Stay tuned for more.
Best Regards,
Altarya DeFlammes
NB: The copyright signs in the PDF are 2015 because most of the preface was written last year... So i thought it would make more sense to put it on ©2015 rather than ©2016 although the post is copy written on 2016, just to clear that out.
Introduction:
The story continues, this time in the eyes of Pakta, a young female stormian who lives in the old ranch that belonged to her grandfather in the middle of the continent of Stormia, she leaves alone without much interaction with the nearby villages, except when having to buy bullets for her golden ancient hunting rifle...
Here it as as promised, part II of the prologue, as i had warned in the last post it would be released on Sunday, and all subsequent parts will be released on Sunday every 2 weeks.
Hope you enjoy part II, the narrator character in this one was actually controlled by a player during the tabletop RPG of stormwinds last year unlike Anne was controlled by me, the Dungeon Master or Game Master as they usually called me.
Also narrated by a stormian(you know, the feline race in this steampunk universe), unlike part 1.
Stay tuned for more.
Best Regards,
Altarya DeFlammes
NB: The copyright signs in the PDF are 2015 because most of the preface was written last year... So i thought it would make more sense to put it on ©2015 rather than ©2016 although the post is copy written on 2016, just to clear that out.
Introduction:
The story continues, this time in the eyes of Pakta, a young female stormian who lives in the old ranch that belonged to her grandfather in the middle of the continent of Stormia, she leaves alone without much interaction with the nearby villages, except when having to buy bullets for her golden ancient hunting rifle...
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I like the way you include graphics and scans into your story, and play around with the font styles.
To me, touches like this make the story come even more alive and make me want to read more of it.
If I were to point my finger at anything, I'd say the two episodes are a bit on the short side.
This is fine if you plan on a daily/bi-daily upload, where the readers still have your story in fresh memory,
but I think that many readers may feel dis-encouraged by a two-week wait between episodes.
I appreciate the feedback, although I understand that these first 2 episodes may be a bit short they are only supposed to be brief introductions to the 12 main characters and their arches of the novel, once we leave the prologue and enter chapter 1 and onward parts will get substantially longer as the small arches established in the prologue expand and new ones arrive, I promise the 2 week delay will be well worth it, i am also unable to write daily.... Blame real life for that and i want to have as much time as possible to review the texts before releasing them, since I first write the draft on a typewriter then i move on to re-writing and re-drawing them on the PDF files, i find it more inspiring and relaxing to write on the typewriter.
Best Regards,
“Altarya DeFlammes„
Player Guilbert Hopehill, the Shieldman presenting for duty!
I have to congratulate you in your first post, just marvellous writing as usual! However I come with one correction and one
demand: I don't recall ever calling you "Dungeon Master or Game Master", lets be simple and go only with Master, and now for the demand: WHEN THE (OMISSION) WILL WE GET TOGETHER TO DO MY PART???
For the heck of it,
El Comandante,
Guilbert Hopehill.