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The descriptions of the suits were fantastic. You knew a scene like this would come sooner or later, and it was pulled off wonderfully.
Typos:
--Trying to put it out of her mind she crossed her arms over her chest, a gesture which [WAS] that much harder due to the fact that her breasts were in the way.
Typos:
--Trying to put it out of her mind she crossed her arms over her chest, a gesture which [WAS] that much harder due to the fact that her breasts were in the way.
I would usually start off telling you about the opening to this. However, there are two things which happened to explain this immediately. The title, and the single phrase that Liz uses.
"I need some advice on a proper fit."
Those alone just set how the chapter was going to go and I happened to simply LOVE it. This is the point where it's showing that Fox will hardly get used to being "Lisitza." It's where the physical differences that he's having a hard time with come up, AND the emotional problems come in. I.E- Orientation. That was done rather well, and more importantly, rather accurately.
....if no one else tells you, you happen to be amazingly good at character development. Don't you dare let anyone tell you otherwise~
Now, the dressing room scene was well executed. And almost frightening well, as it now gives me insight to clothing stores. Being male, Fox would naturally just grab something that fits, is functional, and durable. (Much like shopping at a hardware store..) It's nice seeing Krystal give out fashion tips and tell Liz was doesn't look good on her now that she's a woman, and what looks good on her color wise that she couldn't pull off as a man. That's clever.
Finally... the ending.. after the colorful excursion through the land of the shopping district... it had to end with the painful silence on the way back. I know all good things come to an end..but the realization of how much time the two spent on space and what they did and didn't know. It's like having them become reintroduced to the world all over again.
This.. I have to say makes me wonder how the next chapter is going to go. And that's exactly how it's SUPPOSED to end. Making the reader want to know what's going to happen next. I think that would say it all now wouldn't it?
"I need some advice on a proper fit."
Those alone just set how the chapter was going to go and I happened to simply LOVE it. This is the point where it's showing that Fox will hardly get used to being "Lisitza." It's where the physical differences that he's having a hard time with come up, AND the emotional problems come in. I.E- Orientation. That was done rather well, and more importantly, rather accurately.
....if no one else tells you, you happen to be amazingly good at character development. Don't you dare let anyone tell you otherwise~
Now, the dressing room scene was well executed. And almost frightening well, as it now gives me insight to clothing stores. Being male, Fox would naturally just grab something that fits, is functional, and durable. (Much like shopping at a hardware store..) It's nice seeing Krystal give out fashion tips and tell Liz was doesn't look good on her now that she's a woman, and what looks good on her color wise that she couldn't pull off as a man. That's clever.
Finally... the ending.. after the colorful excursion through the land of the shopping district... it had to end with the painful silence on the way back. I know all good things come to an end..but the realization of how much time the two spent on space and what they did and didn't know. It's like having them become reintroduced to the world all over again.
This.. I have to say makes me wonder how the next chapter is going to go. And that's exactly how it's SUPPOSED to end. Making the reader want to know what's going to happen next. I think that would say it all now wouldn't it?
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