Now, I really liked this. The journal/log type layout is interesting and funny at the same time. The little additions you have there, for example [metallic noise], they are just okay, if they aren't overdone. Just a little hint about the surrounding environment now and than. Also, the crew members come through as real personalities, as each of them relates a bit differently to giving their contribution to the log.

Very interesting little piece, I enjoyed reading this. I even laughed a bit on some places. Very well done, good work.

Thanks for the feedback and the read ^..^

The log entry is definitely an interesting way to tell the story. I don't know if an entire story could be written this way, but I liked it anyway. I really like how you explained their reactions and the environment with brackets.

Thanks ^..^ I didn't clarify this but the idea was it was a text transcript of a audio log... hence the brackets.
I never meant it to be a whole story... kinda a writers doodle if you will ^..^ I miiight expand on this