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This is part 1:
A Tale Of Misery:
Far away and long ago,
In a land I used to know,
I hated all that I could see,
For all I saw was misery.
I left that land from whence I came,
Cowering under a false name,
For I could not bear to see,
Such horrendous scenes of devilry.
Orphans and widows were commonplace,
Forged by our leaders sweeping mace,
Which sent my friends fast to their graves,
Beneath the bloodied waves.
Whatcha think?
This is part 1:
A Tale Of Misery:
Far away and long ago,
In a land I used to know,
I hated all that I could see,
For all I saw was misery.
I left that land from whence I came,
Cowering under a false name,
For I could not bear to see,
Such horrendous scenes of devilry.
Orphans and widows were commonplace,
Forged by our leaders sweeping mace,
Which sent my friends fast to their graves,
Beneath the bloodied waves.
Whatcha think?
Category Poetry / Miscellaneous
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 23.5 kB
HOLY SHI- You LIKED it?!?! Whoa. I thought it was good for about ten minutes after I wrote it. I mean, the first stanza's pretty good, and most of the second decent, but the third is just awful. I haven't read Les Miserables yet, but I've listened to the soundtrack of the play, and I got my father to tell me all about it. From what I heard, my poem would be similar to that kind of background. And thanks, I had no idea what to do for the second part, but now I do! A REBELLION! Then, for the third part, an aftermath... I could change the first part a bit... Finally, I have the inspiration to finish it! Thanks, a lot!
Good for you! I have similar problems too, so it isn't just you. We writers have more difficulty writting than any other person in the world. I'm glad to hear you'll finish it, that's exciting!
I've read published authors of poems and books who were utter crap. This isn't crap.
I've read published authors of poems and books who were utter crap. This isn't crap.
Neato.
Nice use of rhyme scheme. It rolled off the tongue lightly without obstacle.
Imagery and metaphor are used effectively to bring about an image of decay and corruption.
The speaker, though relatively unrelatable, speaks with neither shotgun malice nor total cowardice.
Good job.
Nice use of rhyme scheme. It rolled off the tongue lightly without obstacle.
Imagery and metaphor are used effectively to bring about an image of decay and corruption.
The speaker, though relatively unrelatable, speaks with neither shotgun malice nor total cowardice.
Good job.
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