a simple scene, but a powerfull one.

Poor Lisitza. :O

Nicely written, Vikky. :)

Very heavy scene. The incorporation of tears throughout it was interesting.

Typo:
"She nodded as her crew [STARTED] to file into the [HANGAR] behind her."

An.. amazingly short chapter...but I'd have to call it a 'prologue' chapter for ten.

After chapter 8, this would be Lisitza having to came to realize that she, as Fox was dead. And because everyone else saw it on the monitor and also believes it. This might be short, but a required chapter before the action starts in the next as.... naturally there's going to have to be some transition in between chapters to have the character compose themselves after literally, watching themselves "die."


Albeit I'll call Falco having to punch her strange for her not being able to cry, but I suppose after being in the service so long tears start to dry up and don't come out with nothing less than pain. (Though I'll give you points for Falco showing pangs of pity later in the chapter.)


It's the last line of the chapter however, which make me want to speed into the next- That Liz needs to get back behind the cockpit where she feels most reassured as if that's her security blanket. Yet given the prior incident onscreen, still obviously rattled by it. That... shows depth in characters as something like that you can't just immediately shrug off.

Having Lisitza react so genuinely and emotionally to the "death" of her old identity was a really strong moment. I'm reading this as a trans person and I'm appreciating the complicated feelings about the self, identity, sexuality, and body in the story, and you've got a different approach from most I've seen on the topic of "guy ends up in the body of a woman" that I'm really digging. I especially appreciate that Lisitza being referred to as a woman by the narrative seems to come from a complicated place of self-identification with mixed feelings, rather than the usual idea I've seen "I'm in a woman's body now, I guess I have to start thinking of myself as a woman!" Even her sexuality changing with her gender and her complex feelings about that aspect of her change add a lot of depth to the premise. That was something that happened to me when I transitioned, and it was something I hadn't expected to ever see addressed in a story that wasn't expressly about the trans experience.

I guess what I mean to say is that I came in wanting to give your fic a shot but as a trans reader, I had some reservations regarding how Lisitza's relationship to gender and sexuality might be handled, given the story's transformation-based premise. I'm glad to say that it's been overall a generally positive reading experience!