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One of the story segments in my Merlin Effect story. I call them sections rather than chapters because they jump in time, space, and characters and cover whatever particular event interested me when I wrote it.
This one is how Merlin reveals his magic to Arthur.
I figured I would share at least two sections of the story, to see if anybody thinks its cool. This isn't edited as a note.
This one is how Merlin reveals his magic to Arthur.
I figured I would share at least two sections of the story, to see if anybody thinks its cool. This isn't edited as a note.
Category Story / All
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Size 120 x 113px
File Size 4.4 kB
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Heh, a bit obviously not edited, but it's charming in its own way.
You have a rather nice progression with the way that Merlin thinks about how to reveal his magic, a rather different take on how it has gone in the past. It used to be that he just had it and everyone more or less accepted that. Doing it this way is rather charming, and a little bit cute.
Main thing I like is the progression from a simple, normal way of practicing to the various desperations that he shows, and how it almost seems like he wants a relationship with Arthur rather than anything else. If cleaned up a bit more, I think this could be remarkably sweet as a short story.
You have a rather nice progression with the way that Merlin thinks about how to reveal his magic, a rather different take on how it has gone in the past. It used to be that he just had it and everyone more or less accepted that. Doing it this way is rather charming, and a little bit cute.
Main thing I like is the progression from a simple, normal way of practicing to the various desperations that he shows, and how it almost seems like he wants a relationship with Arthur rather than anything else. If cleaned up a bit more, I think this could be remarkably sweet as a short story.
Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it. :)
Oh yeah, I totally didn't edit it and so I know its in no way perfect or the best it could be or anything like that.
Cool, I'm glad the progression is organized nicely. And yeah I wanted to showcase the fact that it was difficult for Merlin to reveal his magic (Camelot is at this time not friendly to magic users).
Thanks on the positivity. I'm actually having a lot of fun writing these little sections in the world of Merlin Effect.
:)
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