Its amazing!~ =3 Really nice done, I like how it's sorta...story-ish lol
Glad you're feeling better~!!

Heheh, thanks ^^ Yeah. Talks about the pain that can live inside and make one feel like they have died, but knowing that no matter what, one can live on through death so long as they have the will, whether they realize it or not.

Very well put together!
Your choice of wording gave the poem a great rythm.
It has a nice ring to it, don't it?

Well thanks much.
I guess it does, hehe.

Your prose is off a bit on parts of it.. but the deep feeling is there. Speaking from within, as another with a dark soul, I grasp the words and the trail of tears behind them.

Wasn't really looking to make it look good, just was writing it to write it. But thanks.

Some of the better works aren't written to be good, they are just the expressions of the heart put to paper. Thinking can cloud the emotions, sometimes its better to just bleed it out and then worry about what it looks like later if you want. -shrugs- You have a deep, tangled soul.. and there is a lot of conflicted emotions within. I hope you sort them out eventually. if writing like this is what works for you.. then I hope to see more like it.

Heh, you're probably one of the first to want to see more of my works like this. Makes me happy to know, though. And you are pretty much dead on about what you've said as well.