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This short story is 35 pages and dedicated to a character named Striza, it contains 4 inflations, a plot and some pretty decent characterisation. Just to put thing into perspective, it also contains the first use of the blimp suit that I invented years ago. It takes place in the 'Fechi universe' with references to my other characters thrown in. Last story I did was an inflation scene with a story slapped on to vaguely justify it. This time it's a story justifying inflation which really should be the way a story is written. I don't want to spoil anything but I will warn you that it does get very dark in places, my darkest work yet.
If I get enough feedback and you guys enjoy it, I am open to the idea of doing alternate endings. I've written the story in such a way to accommodate it. I've got two planned already, the change happening in different parts of the story.
If I get enough feedback and you guys enjoy it, I am open to the idea of doing alternate endings. I've written the story in such a way to accommodate it. I've got two planned already, the change happening in different parts of the story.
Category Story / Inflation
Species Salamander
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 221.7 kB
Wow, this DOES get dark, but it's not really out of place with how you set it up and it's definitely more interesting than a lot of ways to describe inflation. I really enjoyed it, anyway.
Also had a really good buildup to the ending and making it absolutely clear Striza deserved what she got (although I did still feel slightly bad for her...)
Also had a really good buildup to the ending and making it absolutely clear Striza deserved what she got (although I did still feel slightly bad for her...)
I did really like it! I think it's pretty difficult to give an insight into someone's mind without them coming across as somewhat sympathetic, so I don't think it's unusual to feel just a little bad for her... but then even if she had survived it, she'd probably go back to being just as vile as before.
I'd like to see what else you had in mind, but the ending here definitely seemed suitable!
I'd like to see what else you had in mind, but the ending here definitely seemed suitable!
Ok, I kinda wish I red the description first instead of going "ooo~! A inflation story from Sdwaggy? Yes please!" It does get pretty dark at the end but still, a really good story and while this isn't my sort of thing, the ending certainly is appropriate! Does that me we'll be seeing more stories from ya? :3
Glad you liked it! I doubt I'll be doing anymore stories any time soon. Took a week to write this one. Even in this story I felt my inflation descritptions were getting repetative, so I fear future stories will end up with a samey kind of feel. I only wrote this one because the idea started to bang around in my head, something like 3 years after I thought of it. It forced me to write it. :P
As the not being your sort of thing. Enjoy the two alternate endings I wrote, you'll probably prefer them.
As the not being your sort of thing. Enjoy the two alternate endings I wrote, you'll probably prefer them.
Aww~ but I understand. I miss seeing ya put up those fun comics but I have all of them saved on my computer so I can look through them whenever I want ^^
I red the first alternate ending already and it was pretty good. I'm reading the second one once I'm home but judging from the title, I think I'm gonna like it more.
I red the first alternate ending already and it was pretty good. I'm reading the second one once I'm home but judging from the title, I think I'm gonna like it more.
Oh, wow, this, this is good, you writed a amazing story here, the buildup, the characters, the writing, everything is amazing, all the things are described so nicely, this is the best inflation story i ever seen, nothing compares to it, i hope you write another one, because, you know, you know so well, also Striza, is a amazing character.
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