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The second of three poems I wrote a few nights ago.
I should have the third one up tomorrow, so don't go away! :3
As always any and all feedback is accepted, if you have anything at all on your mind regarding my poem, do not hesitate to leave a comment or send me a PM.
I should have the third one up tomorrow, so don't go away! :3
As always any and all feedback is accepted, if you have anything at all on your mind regarding my poem, do not hesitate to leave a comment or send me a PM.
Category Poetry / All
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 2.4 kB
Okay, you enjoy critique, correct? Well I picked a random poem of yours to critique your writing style.
in poetry, there isn't necessarily a "right" way to do it. But there is a right way to do certain things. Think of it this way..
Say you wanted to write... more poetic and so people had to figure out a little bit of the meaning, it'd go something like this:
I'll start with how you write. I've found a pattern in all your poetry that stands out. You want to get your words out, plain and simple. You don't care alot how it's done though. You don't really imply anything, and you pretty much come out and say it. Now there's absolutely nothing wrong with that. But if you want to draw people in, you gotta sound at least... a little mroe poetic, in terms of making your poetry somewhat confusing for people to extrapalate. To start doing it now would be perfect, because since people like your poems, if you wrote confusing ones, they'd want to figure it out more.
On with the example. Say you wanted to mention how two people love eachother, like in that poem you wrote for Alex and I. Well with your writing style you'd probably use a simile to get the word right out there immediately. "They love eachother like a....etc."
However, if you'd like to imply and arouse interest more, you'd use a little more complcated devices. Like personification. "Two hearts moan to eachother passionately." It still lets the reader know there's love, but it doesn't come right out and say it. Does that make sense?
So what I see is a great opportunity for you to majorly improve right here. Next time you write a poem, write it like you ususally would. Then, read it over, and anything that's stated clearly, try and use a different device, or imply it a little more. I know it's hard with a rhyme scheme if you're going that direction, but that's why I perfer free verse.
Good luck with it anyways though, I hope I helped.
in poetry, there isn't necessarily a "right" way to do it. But there is a right way to do certain things. Think of it this way..
Say you wanted to write... more poetic and so people had to figure out a little bit of the meaning, it'd go something like this:
I'll start with how you write. I've found a pattern in all your poetry that stands out. You want to get your words out, plain and simple. You don't care alot how it's done though. You don't really imply anything, and you pretty much come out and say it. Now there's absolutely nothing wrong with that. But if you want to draw people in, you gotta sound at least... a little mroe poetic, in terms of making your poetry somewhat confusing for people to extrapalate. To start doing it now would be perfect, because since people like your poems, if you wrote confusing ones, they'd want to figure it out more.
On with the example. Say you wanted to mention how two people love eachother, like in that poem you wrote for Alex and I. Well with your writing style you'd probably use a simile to get the word right out there immediately. "They love eachother like a....etc."
However, if you'd like to imply and arouse interest more, you'd use a little more complcated devices. Like personification. "Two hearts moan to eachother passionately." It still lets the reader know there's love, but it doesn't come right out and say it. Does that make sense?
So what I see is a great opportunity for you to majorly improve right here. Next time you write a poem, write it like you ususally would. Then, read it over, and anything that's stated clearly, try and use a different device, or imply it a little more. I know it's hard with a rhyme scheme if you're going that direction, but that's why I perfer free verse.
Good luck with it anyways though, I hope I helped.
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