"Come for me,
set me free.
Invade the darkness
beside me.
A distant dove,
the moon above;
they savor a sky
that should be mine."
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Man, I haven't wavered this much on posting something in a long time.
I started out of a dream I no longer remember with the opening stanza of this poem on the tip of my tongue, and quickly scribbled it down before it was gone. From there, I wrote this slowly over the day; picking at it, letting it cool, and picking at it some more. As such, it feels a little more processed than I typically go for, but there's enough raw emotion here that I think it makes up for it. Once you read something so many times, however, it's hard to tell anymore.
I dunno particularly what spurred this piece out of me, especially NOW of all times. But I'm so desperate to write these days that, like a dog at the dinner table, I'll take any scrap of inspiration thrown my way. So what if we're carving away at old wounds that probably should be left where they lay? I guess that's what you could call an occupational hazard.
Also, I know this is the kinda thing people don't particularly like to see (or perhaps see too much whenever the idea of poetry comes up) but it is what it is. I've been negative as hell lately in my writing and I can't seem to do much about it right now. For once, I feel the need to apologize for it, only cause I keep saying I'm gonna quit and I haven't. I started a couple "lighter" pieces lately, but I couldn't quite string them together. /shrug.
Anywho, if you made it this far, thanks for reading. Comments/critique welcome as always. I've already written half an essay, so I'll cut my usual ramblings short. 'Til next time.
Oh, and despite the tone of this poem, have a happy upcoming Thanksgiving everyone (or whatever the equivalent holiday is for you.)
set me free.
Invade the darkness
beside me.
A distant dove,
the moon above;
they savor a sky
that should be mine."
----
Man, I haven't wavered this much on posting something in a long time.
I started out of a dream I no longer remember with the opening stanza of this poem on the tip of my tongue, and quickly scribbled it down before it was gone. From there, I wrote this slowly over the day; picking at it, letting it cool, and picking at it some more. As such, it feels a little more processed than I typically go for, but there's enough raw emotion here that I think it makes up for it. Once you read something so many times, however, it's hard to tell anymore.
I dunno particularly what spurred this piece out of me, especially NOW of all times. But I'm so desperate to write these days that, like a dog at the dinner table, I'll take any scrap of inspiration thrown my way. So what if we're carving away at old wounds that probably should be left where they lay? I guess that's what you could call an occupational hazard.
Also, I know this is the kinda thing people don't particularly like to see (or perhaps see too much whenever the idea of poetry comes up) but it is what it is. I've been negative as hell lately in my writing and I can't seem to do much about it right now. For once, I feel the need to apologize for it, only cause I keep saying I'm gonna quit and I haven't. I started a couple "lighter" pieces lately, but I couldn't quite string them together. /shrug.
Anywho, if you made it this far, thanks for reading. Comments/critique welcome as always. I've already written half an essay, so I'll cut my usual ramblings short. 'Til next time.
Oh, and despite the tone of this poem, have a happy upcoming Thanksgiving everyone (or whatever the equivalent holiday is for you.)
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Look at it this way, even the most interesting people got to show themselves in the mirror, and look back.
I've seen plenty of that proof from artists, speakers, and people of power and learning that kind stuff can make you think a certain way. Sometimes it's the state of things.
Some facts will go over people's heads, might freak them out, crack a smile or a frown, but provoking a person's mind at all with a question is funny to think about. Stuff like comedy teaches this simple fact in life every chance it gets; Your mood can cause trends, others might want a cult classic, might even respect change once the punchline starts making sense.
I've seen plenty of that proof from artists, speakers, and people of power and learning that kind stuff can make you think a certain way. Sometimes it's the state of things.
Some facts will go over people's heads, might freak them out, crack a smile or a frown, but provoking a person's mind at all with a question is funny to think about. Stuff like comedy teaches this simple fact in life every chance it gets; Your mood can cause trends, others might want a cult classic, might even respect change once the punchline starts making sense.
I'm not sure it'd be as hard if, like you say, I didn't have to look back. Until recently, I've always been a prose kind of writer. One's person comes through far more subtly in that mode of writing.
Poetry (at least the kind I like and try to write) is like standing before your reader and waiting for a coming storm. It might be rain, it might be hail; it might be nothing at all. But no matter what, you're gonna see something you can't unsee. In my case, I tend to see things I'd preferred stay forgotten, or at least remain obscure. Distant.
I guess I worry sometimes about what others see because I KNOW what I see in the same words. I'd never really given it much thought before though, but maybe you're right - that's kinda the whole point isn't it?
Dunno if all/any of that made sense, but you always manage to get me thinking. Thanks again, Sable.
Poetry (at least the kind I like and try to write) is like standing before your reader and waiting for a coming storm. It might be rain, it might be hail; it might be nothing at all. But no matter what, you're gonna see something you can't unsee. In my case, I tend to see things I'd preferred stay forgotten, or at least remain obscure. Distant.
I guess I worry sometimes about what others see because I KNOW what I see in the same words. I'd never really given it much thought before though, but maybe you're right - that's kinda the whole point isn't it?
Dunno if all/any of that made sense, but you always manage to get me thinking. Thanks again, Sable.
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