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yeah, this is my first attempt at poetry so don't laugh too hard
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Don't assume that since it's your first try people will laugh. It's the same thing I did, and my first poem turned out fine.
I'm not laughing, it's actually quite good. Whether you think the repetitiveness was necessary or not, it added to the message, IMO.
So all in all, it's very good for a first, I'll watch you and hope for more just like it. :3
I'm not laughing, it's actually quite good. Whether you think the repetitiveness was necessary or not, it added to the message, IMO.
So all in all, it's very good for a first, I'll watch you and hope for more just like it. :3
Oh damn *philosophical overload* , a very good first poem. a very kick ass poem in the form of philosophy and symbolism. Great use of metaphoric language and rhetoric mannerism. I applaud you for this master piece of duality and rationality. You have some potential keep up the good work, I wouldn't laugh at nothing in the fabrication of existence ever.
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