
This is the story of Serali, a very unusual child who grows up to be an even more unusual woman. Eventually she's going to change the whole world, and in this book she sees a good bit of it, but ultimately this first book is not about changing the world, but about finding your place in it.
In this chapter Serali finally meets her own kind and begins to learn about the past and present of the dragon race.
Rest of the story:
Prologue - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2120534
Chapter 1 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2142068
Chapter 2 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2165107
Chapter 3 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2192135
Chapter 4 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2216697
Chapter 5 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2240662
Chapter 6 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2264132
Chapter 7 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2287383
Chapter 8 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2309579
Chapter 9 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2333132
Chapter 10 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2360739
Chapter 11 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2386553
In this chapter Serali finally meets her own kind and begins to learn about the past and present of the dragon race.
Rest of the story:
Prologue - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2120534
Chapter 1 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2142068
Chapter 2 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2165107
Chapter 3 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2192135
Chapter 4 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2216697
Chapter 5 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2240662
Chapter 6 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2264132
Chapter 7 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2287383
Chapter 8 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2309579
Chapter 9 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2333132
Chapter 10 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2360739
Chapter 11 - http://www.furaffinity.net/view/2386553
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Dragon (Other)
Size 98 x 120px
File Size 60.9 kB
Listed in Folders
This is what I've been looking forward to!
I found one problem in there in terms of grammar:
"Trevasslan vikar! Brith tav morin?" His voice was full of anger, his teeth bared in a raging snarl. Serali spoke in the only language she knew. "I don't understand you!"
Should always be new speaker, new line.
I liked how you broke up the creation tale with Serali questioning about it. Not only does it help the reader to understand, but it keeps it interesting too! Well done, and keep it up!
I found one problem in there in terms of grammar:
"Trevasslan vikar! Brith tav morin?" His voice was full of anger, his teeth bared in a raging snarl. Serali spoke in the only language she knew. "I don't understand you!"
Should always be new speaker, new line.
I liked how you broke up the creation tale with Serali questioning about it. Not only does it help the reader to understand, but it keeps it interesting too! Well done, and keep it up!
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