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Alright! Here's the second part of Upheaval!
Following where Part 1 left off, we rejoin Sal and his dragon at the farm. But with the dragon rapidly growing, how will their relationship evolve next? And what's that strange sound about?
If you want to find out, then have a read!
And please, leave me a comment. What did you like? What didn't you like? If you don't say anything, I'll never know!
LS7
Next - Part 3
Previous - Part 1
Following where Part 1 left off, we rejoin Sal and his dragon at the farm. But with the dragon rapidly growing, how will their relationship evolve next? And what's that strange sound about?
If you want to find out, then have a read!
And please, leave me a comment. What did you like? What didn't you like? If you don't say anything, I'll never know!
LS7
Next - Part 3
Previous - Part 1
Category Story / Vore
Species Western Dragon
Size 120 x 114px
File Size 23.3 kB
Listed in Folders
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" 'I'm just a pianist Tara. I have no idea. All I know is how to make people happy.' " I feel as though this is a little forced.
Parallels that come to mind are, "I'm just a tragedy writer... all I know is how to make people sad;" "I'm just a physical trainer... all I know is how to make people skinnier;" "I'm just a carpenter... all I know is how to hammer the fuck out of a piece of wood." Unless the comment is meant to be ironic, it seems a bit self aware, especially considering Sal's (from what I know back in Ch. 1) simple nature.
Tara's awful intuitive for a lawyer.
The different quotation marks for 'Little buddy?' are not really necessary.
" 'Rrrah!'." No period after an exclamation mark, ever.
The flow of time and of events get confusing once Inarius and Exelsus' names get mentioned.
Things get excitingly eerie when the turned man starts talking in bold...
"Waddling its way back next to Sal, its stomach" Its stomach waddled its way back to Sal?
I guess the dragon's name is Inarius now? o:
" 'I'm just a pianist Tara. I have no idea. All I know is how to make people happy.' " I feel as though this is a little forced.
Parallels that come to mind are, "I'm just a tragedy writer... all I know is how to make people sad;" "I'm just a physical trainer... all I know is how to make people skinnier;" "I'm just a carpenter... all I know is how to hammer the fuck out of a piece of wood." Unless the comment is meant to be ironic, it seems a bit self aware, especially considering Sal's (from what I know back in Ch. 1) simple nature.
Tara's awful intuitive for a lawyer.
The different quotation marks for 'Little buddy?' are not really necessary.
" 'Rrrah!'." No period after an exclamation mark, ever.
The flow of time and of events get confusing once Inarius and Exelsus' names get mentioned.
Things get excitingly eerie when the turned man starts talking in bold...
"Waddling its way back next to Sal, its stomach" Its stomach waddled its way back to Sal?
I guess the dragon's name is Inarius now? o:
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