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First off, this is a little dark, but I rated it General since a mere mentioning of death and the existing threat is nothing new to any and everybody. SO...
Yes! It's a poem. My first written for furries in the fandom. The idea was really funny when me and my bf were throwing back ideas for Thursday's Prompt. He randomly said Refrigerator when he heard restaurant. Then he began to elaborate---like an oral version of prewriting!
The Thursday Prompt idea is brought to you by
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Anyways, the idea of two anthro animals being confined in the deep corners of a restaurant waiting for the doom of being cooked appealed to my darker nature. So... then I thought the best way to deliver such a dark sense of(humor for me) was by writing it in poetic format!!!
Tell me what you think! Critique is accepted and encouraged. I kind of think it could be better, but I write and move on and do better next time. It's my way.
Yes! It's a poem. My first written for furries in the fandom. The idea was really funny when me and my bf were throwing back ideas for Thursday's Prompt. He randomly said Refrigerator when he heard restaurant. Then he began to elaborate---like an oral version of prewriting!
The Thursday Prompt idea is brought to you by
's journal.Anyways, the idea of two anthro animals being confined in the deep corners of a restaurant waiting for the doom of being cooked appealed to my darker nature. So... then I thought the best way to deliver such a dark sense of(humor for me) was by writing it in poetic format!!!
Tell me what you think! Critique is accepted and encouraged. I kind of think it could be better, but I write and move on and do better next time. It's my way.
Category Poetry / Abstract
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 101px
File Size 3 kB
Well, this is something a bit different. Very good poem, in a way, because it tells a story. I rather enjoyed reading this, while the poem format isn't as easy as a story would have been, the little tale it tells is rather delicious with its dark humor. Nice little piece. Good work.
The idea is pretty awesome. I would say that your meter is a little weak there. I mean, the narrative is really really clear, but your pace and flow suffer because of that. I, and this is just me personally here, think it would work better if the animals weren't anthro, but I think it worked fine as is.
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