This was a pretty good read. Starting rather light-heartedly (despite some grim details) and turning to a more serious story with deep, dark past of the main character. :D The description was done well. There was a nice amount of details and description of e.g. clothes and scenery, but not too much to get the reader distracted from the events. And the plot seems interesting enough to keep the reader reading further. For a moment I was feeling pretty bad, when the thug stabbed Gale. But of course he'd survive that, otherwise the story would end pretty shortly. :P In fact you got me rather interested, so I'll waiting for the next part.

Sorry for not commenting more in depth, but I blame the lateness. I should be in bed already. >< But anyways, I liked this. Keep going! ^^

My actual first reaction to seeing this comment here was to squeal and do a happy dance over the fact that i got a comment, think that made my day. o..o

Gale actually isn't the actual lead in this story, though he does have a good role as this little opening suggests. I'm trying to remember what i'd planned the main character for this story to be, i forgot it when i went to sleep.. >.o I was actually worried i didn't give enough descriptions after i put it up, but then again the usual amount i do is probably toooo much.. (600+ words describing the character. I've been told that qualifies as overkill) 'Tis good to hear that the amount i did served the purpose.

Many thanks for the comment! <3

I'm glad if it made you happy. :D

Ahh, I see. Let's hope it comes back to you. I'm really looking forward to the continuation. ^^ And it's true, too detailed and long desciption can make an otherwise interesting text rather boring. As with everything, the middle course often works the best, no matter how tempted one is to go on and on. Heh, I have caught myself sometimes rambling forever about the same thing, for example someone's appearance and expressions in my writings. :D