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I am going to post a few blurbs of unfinished lyrics, to see if there is any feedback and to see what people think.
This is a song called undone, it needs some work, but its one of the few that I wrote while I was up in the hills.
Keep in mind this is supposed to be metal, so its not going to be happy, its not peering into the roos mind to see what hes thinking, this is supposed to just rock. so the roo is still a happy bouncy thing, just thought I'd mention that before you read it!
This is a song called undone, it needs some work, but its one of the few that I wrote while I was up in the hills.
Keep in mind this is supposed to be metal, so its not going to be happy, its not peering into the roos mind to see what hes thinking, this is supposed to just rock. so the roo is still a happy bouncy thing, just thought I'd mention that before you read it!
Category Story / Rock
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 24 kB
Figure I'll write it formal cause I find Lyricz Very complicated and often Frustrating, Especially when There'z emotional Attachment when writing in General....
Seems like your first verse would sound more fun as the second, bit re-wording to match it up like a ballad of being thrown in hell. Good concept of being damned, dragged in hell, then reflecting on everything.
"The reaper prepares for another day" part felt outta place, I didn't find it as intimidating as everything else.
Have fun with it Rainhopper, I'd go insane if I still messed around with writing lyrics.
Seems like your first verse would sound more fun as the second, bit re-wording to match it up like a ballad of being thrown in hell. Good concept of being damned, dragged in hell, then reflecting on everything.
"The reaper prepares for another day" part felt outta place, I didn't find it as intimidating as everything else.
Have fun with it Rainhopper, I'd go insane if I still messed around with writing lyrics.
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