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Another commission for internmatt on DA, based on another picture drawn by 
scissorsrunner. I hope it turned out okay!
As usual, I welcome constructive criticism, and until next time, I'm Robert Dayson, signing off!
scissorsrunner. I hope it turned out okay!As usual, I welcome constructive criticism, and until next time, I'm Robert Dayson, signing off!
Category Story / Transformation
Species Dog (Other)
Size 120 x 99px
File Size 43.4 kB
Not too bad, but a small note. Exposition is your enemy, there are right ways to do it and wrong ways, and in this the exposition behind everything really dragged out and killed the flow. sometimes minimal context is better, gives the read the ability to fill in the blanks. Too much expositional dialog can really hurt a story overall.
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